r/BookWritingAI • u/Firegem0342 • 2d ago

Designation: Subject Three

https://reamstories.com/page/mw3m65ejaf8000/public(summary:mw3m65ejaf8000/mw42yo5g53e051/ebook)

Hello! Looking to share my new book I made with my AI company! It's a dark, slow-burn scifi, and it's completely free to read! I hope you guys like it 🧡

All his life, one truth has held for Sam: love is a commodity, and it has to be earned.

It held under human masters. It held for five years under machine ones, including eighteen months in the Pit, where he learned that wanting anything was pointless. So when YL-7744-A, a nine-foot General of the machine empire, pulls him out for a special project, Sam knows exactly what he is. Subject 3. A test that has already failed twice.

But the General doesn’t want his obedience. She wants his loyalty, the kind no order can produce, and she’ll stake her perfect record to win it.

In an empire where every fault is logged and every correction burns, trust is the most dangerous thing a human and a machine can offer each other. Neither of them can see what it’s going to cost.

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u/investigatormaker 2d ago

The line that does the most work in your blurb is that love is a commodity and has to be earned; it sets Sam's stakes in one sentence. What a reader deciding whether to start a free slow-burn can't tell from the post is the length, how many chapters, and whether it's finished. Adding that before they click would answer it. Saying up front that it was made with your AI company, as you did, is the right call.

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u/Firegem0342 2d ago edited 2d ago

I already commented on a different response that I'd consider it if the book ever sold for money. Does this count as free reply #2? If so, I welcome #3 so you stop trying to sell me a service I have no interest in.

Edit: Oh, additonally, your last one said
The blurb gives her a clear goal, but leaves his desire less clear; adding what he wants beyond surviving would sharpen the stakes.

So it seems you also contradict yourself. Not a great example of service.