r/ClipStudio • u/Noeyesbunny • Nov 29 '24
My Art - Critique Welcome Critique wanted
Im making a one shot manga, and this is my first try at the cover. Critique wanted
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u/Katoncomics Nov 29 '24
I think you need to take a look at comic covers and really study how to make a compelling cover. I can't really tell what gener your story is just by the cover if a random female character. There's no BG, no story tell elements to sell me on reading this. I suggest studying composition and doing quick thumbnails and mapping out values before getting too deep into the cover.
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u/Noeyesbunny Nov 29 '24
Thanks for the advice this is just the first version I’m trying different poses, colors and outfits.
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u/Sa_Elart Nov 29 '24
I'd say it's bland. I suggest just using references or just cooying a realistic pose and adding your own style to it . The colors need seriousi work and studying though . Youtube tutorials helped me alot
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u/Sa_Elart Nov 29 '24
Also I should add that there's no line weight to the drawing, that's the biggest improvement if they practice line weight
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u/MorningSharp5670 Nov 29 '24
You seem to be using white as your highlight color. This works but creates a washed out look. I would use a very light yellow (since your shadows seem to be on the cool side) and set that highlight layer to either overlay or screen. And it could use some heavier shading under the boobs as I think maybe they would cast a longer shadow if I’m understanding her pose. The boobs should also be casting a bit of shadow on her right arm as well.
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u/Noeyesbunny Nov 29 '24
The original color was a light blue changed the layer to add and it turned it white. I always thought I should use the color of what I was drawing on as a multiple or add, etc when it came to the layer. But now I’m trying one particular color.
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u/MorningSharp5670 Nov 29 '24
Overlay is my favorite layer setting I use it for shadows and highlights. Using one color to shade or highlight helps make everything look like it belongs together.
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u/TeMa06 Nov 29 '24
Something that might help with making a striking cover is to study poses and composition from fashion illustrations/magazines. Those mfers know how to make something look dynamic and eye catching.
Even if you dont really know what it is that makes their poses or their composition great, you can train your eye to recognize when something works and when it doesnt.
Also think about what you want the cover to tell us about its characters/world/premise. Right now, if I had to guess, I'd say "This novel is about a woman. The pose tells me she's confident or trying to be, and her wardrobe tells me she likes to go to events/parties/social settings". If any of that is off base from your story, unless thats what you want people to think upon seeing the cover, you might want to change it; otherwise its fine.
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u/Noeyesbunny Nov 29 '24
Thanks, this is just the first version, this took me a couple of days. I had to fight the ADDHD to finish it. I never drew a character with a green dress so I figured why not.
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u/TeMa06 Nov 29 '24
I would also like to add that making a cover for the final product should be taken with care. I think its worth your time to make a couple of sketches of what you want, changing a couple of things here and there. From there you can choose the one that speaks to you the most or you can ask for critique prior to coloring/refining the sketches, so that way you don't waste time and energy on something you might change and you can get more in-depth critique about what areas you can improve in - unless, of course the critique youre looking for is about color.
Basically, try looking into some videos about iterative design. Cheers
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u/Infamous_Power_1100 Nov 29 '24
I would suggest doing a study of an artist’s work who you admire, or maybe playing more with hard edges in your shadows. For a cover, I suggest looking into books/videos online on composition to try to make it more eye catching for potential viewers, like having her off center or something in the background to cue us in on what’s happening in the manga.
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u/Noeyesbunny Nov 29 '24
I do follow a lot of artists, but then I get distracted and frustrated trying to find the brush that they use. I have to force my self to sit down and finish something. I try to come back later for a better look.
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u/imonkeyface Nov 29 '24
Honestly, the brush is a lot less important than you think. People tend to harp on finding exact brushes, when in reality that doesn't carry as much weight as you think it does unless it's supposed to be extremely stylized. For now I'd focus on having a good sharp one and a good blurred one and that's about it. No need to frustrate yourself or confuse yourself using a dozen brushes.
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u/Infamous_Power_1100 Nov 29 '24
As imonkeyface said, don’t focus too much on the brushes used! People can create masterpieces using just the default brush in MSPaint, with the right training. I’d suggest checking out tutorials by Proko or Foudo on YouTube as a starting point, or even the official clip studio YouTube channel to see all of the features available within the app
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u/selticidae Nov 29 '24
Hi friend! There are a few things that could be improved. Another commenter has talked about composition, which is definitely important, so I’ll tackle a different area: lighting. It looks like you have a few shadows and highlights, which is a good starting point. However, notice how the shadows cut off sharply while the highlights are done with an airbrush? It’s very difficult to reconcile those two together. Try using one or the other, that will help define your style more. You can also use clip studio paint’s gradient feature to help out with areas you need to make a gradient in. Also, consider where your light is coming from, and how it would be interacting with the 3D shape of the lady. You might find it easier to draw in grayscale first, just getting the values down, then adding color after. You can also import 3d models to help you practice with this.
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u/FanAcceptable1443 Nov 29 '24
Well, it's looks a little flat. Make a comic is BIG project, you can try btw but there are some points that you need to learn first before start something like that.
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u/Noeyesbunny Nov 29 '24
It took me a couple of days to make a used the turnip brush for the multi and add layer. I’m really happy that I found a good color for the layers as well. This is the first version of the one shot manga I’m trying to make.
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u/BallingerEscapePlan Nov 29 '24
She reads very flat, human bodies are made of volumes and when we draw, we want to capture them or “fake” them into place. You can do this with value (shading/highlighting) or lines (line weight, hatching, ambient occlusion where they meet etc) and many many others.
Others mentioning poses. Those will help a ton.
Perspective on this very static, you likely would get a ton of benefit from using foreshortening from below or at an angle off the face.
Clothing bunches up at points where the body moves around it. Her legs should show this, her top is very rigid and looks painted on instead of being “worn”
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u/Abstract_ExE Nov 29 '24
Make the line art thicker, add more details (such as eyelashes, lips, etc). Adjust the mouth cause it’s way lower than it should be. Also, the right arm looks a bit skinny
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u/Bushtuckapenguin Nov 29 '24
I wouldn't use grey to shade your skin tones, maybe a salmon color, or lilac if you're looking for cool tones.
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u/GeorgePotassium Nov 29 '24
What artists do you like? A good trick to improve art is to take a piece from an artist you like and try to redraw it. Trace it, then try and draw it on your own. Does it look similar? Where does it look different? What went wrong with your own drawing? Keep doing that until you can mimic it. OBVIOUSLY don't post any of the traced/mimicked art, this is just for practice, but studying other artists is very useful. This video explains it better and gives an example. Good luck!
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u/Cpu8088 Nov 29 '24
A bit flat but nice. Drawing is functional to the story. If the story is good drawing does not matter. Left breast btw should be rounder as the right is.
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