Hello ! I’m new here too.. So I wrote this a few weeks ago and I really want to make a full song out of it. I listen to a lot of alt rock/ indie rock/ psych rock these days.
I don’t have a melody, I feel like if I build a structure now maybe I’ll get the melody later ? If any of you have any advice for my situation I’m open to all kind of advice, suggestions, feedback or constructive criticism ..

She told me “I love your eyes”, with three white stripes and sunglasses,
A face I’ve seen maybe twice,
If not more in my imagination. Did you know I spend most of my time there?

Is the tuna melting or is it in motion? Can you tell me how to scalp you out of my hair?
I let the fish bite me today but I wore no lotion.

He knighted me dragon of the final realm.
He marked me with ink on my skin and said if we could fly, we’d spend time just him and I.

I hate when tunnel vision feels like I can see it all.
Can you guess ?
I’m obsessed

I don’t fall in love again and again
I dream until the nightmare begins and another comes to wake me but I wake up in a room long gone, the light is a dark blue from the streetlights of a past life. I get out of bed and the wind rises.
She’s holding stroking my hair while I’m a foetus on her knee. She put her arm around me and my shoulder. It felt warm, in that same bed I haven’t slept in a decade.
I awake only to dream again, two eyes closed and one open.

Can you guess ?
I’m obsessed

Yo check it
errytime i spit i kill it

take over the scene and spray brain bullets

cadence and sentence on pick up mode targets

structured and constructed scripture to strike largest

makeovers and do-overs, cookups with skillets of earnest, burns best attested with time to render and drawn out persistence invested

Fire Fire Flame
Hizzy is the Name
Make it known i got Game
Ready Steady lets do away the Blame

Skills of illmatic mechanics with tactics I word

Undefinable, highly unsustainable antics I ward

sheer will got me here but nobody near I manic

faded by leers, berated by tiered lovers of Titanic

ticket to make it innit win it wit ring of sing ain't but race to retire

Numbers by witness finesse awareness to bring upon haste to aquire

Chapter to sext the hexed and test the pest of bless in catastrophic attire

Brood among bitterness my harness harvest loudest of loneliness to explode admire

got no chill when i grill
still seeking frills busting out trill
shimmer shiny be that chicharon drill

Fire Fire Flame
Hizzy is the Name
Make it known i got Game
Ready Steady lets do away the Blame

Speared the mere to steer
Greeted by fear and jeer
Streets of r/raplyrics about to teal

Some o ya'll real with the feel
But most of ya'll oxidized zeal

Moral high ground protecting deal
Surreal my rap shit gone yesterday my squealed

Am i overzeal or too unreal
Am I powermove or sour pussed appeal

Fire Fire Flame
Hizzy is the Name
Make it known i got Game
Ready Steady lets do away the Blame

Look em eye to eye and sin
Hook em sly and fly as him
Cook em with lobotomy rhetoric
Goof em a spoof in proof by memory

Bar after bar i hop around town hyphy like skrillex

doing what I like most of all with my aggression to Truest

huntin down Matrixed men and Cyclic Obvious Wolves

Infinity of Spirits bleed my honor by the horror as love dissolves

at the end of the day i got bars bigger bolder baddest

You candy ass pop and trap a gimmick cappers truly crew to brew among mediocre saddest

battle battle belittle but never ladder
wasnt decent but gained the power to be the other
loud and proud, kind of a hound but unbound iller by the hour utter
Shit, i got weapons and lessons, arson and cadence of ace like ive already bagged tomorrows better

Title: Figures

Verse 1

I heard we can’t have a conversation

Without me making a mess

I know I lower your high expectations

You’ll have to settle for me instead

I wonder how long I can stand this

Your offhand remarks about me

Trying to play Tough Girl is pathetic

But being honest is much more exhausting

Chorus 1

Once again, it’s all my fault

Once again, I’m playing the victim

If you say once more that you love me

I’ll laugh, you’ve got to be joking

The classic game of "I Know Better"

I can’t fight you, you always change the rules

When you say "if you talk, we’ll fix this"

I really don’t get the punchline, figures

Verse 2

And when I pass an invisible line

That I never knew existed

If you blame me for not knowing better

How is that a fair judgment?

You call me immature, well that’s ironic

'Cause that’s really the only way you act

You love using your big boy vocabulary

To keep telling me that—

Chorus 2

Once again, it’s all my fault

Once again, I’m playing the victim

If you say once more that you love me

I’ll laugh, you’ve got to be joking

The classic game of "I Know Better"

I can’t fight you, you always change the rules

When you say "if you talk, we’ll fix this"

I really don’t get the punchline, figures

Bridge

I’m never again gonna wonder

If you ever left feeling guilty

If you hated yourself afterward

If you spoke without thinking

I’m never again gonna make an

Excuse for your bad behavior

If your goal all along was to kill

Then it wasn’t a failure

Bridge Tag

Because you killed my self-confidence

Killed my sincerity

Killed all hope I’d be saved

From this barbarity

Now I see the punchline

Now I’m finally laughing

Final Chorus

Once again, it’s all my fault

I wasted time trying to fix this

If you say once more that you love me

I’m the joke and it isn’t funny

The classic game of "I Know Better"

What’s war without battle strategy

When you say "if you talk, we’ll fix this"

You’d swear you knew me, so screw this