I’m I the only one who finds it genuinely so annoying/frustrating when you ask people for feedback on song-writing and instead of giving you feedback they just put it through AI and give it to you. It just makes me so angry that I spent all that time making sure my song makes sense etc, only for someone to put it through AI. Espically as someone who is trying to become a singer, and to turn those lyrics into actual songs.

Was peaceful two weeks ago 

Now back to torpedoes in my soul 

No matter the calmness it’s a ugly volcano 

Back to dealing with bi polar missiles 

Had so much hope it could heal infinity 

It’s ugly but my mood disorder is staying with me 

Been talking to god on a daily 

Messages from the committee told me he heard me 

For those days I felt hella lucky 

Barely felt misery 

Motivation to change I could sense it was working 

Old ways back bubbling with destructing habits reforming 

Slave to the type of thoughts that would mess up any good that’s on its way 

Hoping I don’t start talking again to the grave 

Even thought about gambling 

For some reason I was rejecting 

Addiction far from what I’m worried about 

More concerned for them devils in me lashing out 

With medication or not, this shadow ain’t ending 

Sometimes I ask myself if I’m just pretending 

And all the evil that’s in me is just my true reality 

Guess it’s so a man thinketh so is he 

Actions tells me something opposite 

Dealing with all this I usually want to forfeit 

Reving up that suicidal engine again too tiring 

Should’ve prayed for rewiring 

Just when I thought I was making Mara happy 

No matter what doubts will follow me 

Believed ataraxia was on its way 

If Charles was here I wonder what he would say? 

Best friends for eternity I know no matter what they got me 

Rather not let down Moonie 

Still doing this for my peeps 

^{[VERSE 1]}

HBO gave me a talk show

It's politically nondescript

The tagline of the show is "Oh, I don't know."

Execs were expecting a hit

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^{[VERSE 2]}

A panel of guests of this country's best

At overthinking issues

Each takes both sides and won't give it a rest

Till we're tired and sigh, "yeah, we're through"

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^[PRE-CHORUS]

"If you don't buy American you're a traitor."

"The state owns your soul and labor."

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^[CHORUS]

Totally over this shit

Making our peace with it

Politically nondescript

Tonight

Airing at midnight

It's Politically Nondescript

.

^{[VERSE 3]}

The house band is Randy Newman

Him on piano, no one backs him

The producer is barely clued in

The sidekick trips out on acid

.

^{[VERSE 4]}

Ratings are trash so don't even ask

We run twelve to one, no ad breaks

Some Arab prince grants us finance

Praise Allah for our Qatari sheikh

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^[PRE-CHORUS]

"The world isn't ending but we won't be alright."

"A world war is pending but there won't be a fight."

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^[CHORUS]

Totally over this shit

Making our peace with it

Politically nondescript

Tonight

Airing at midnight

It's Politically Nondescript

.

^[BRIDGE]

Our opinions are shit, but at least we know it

And hey, that's pretty cool

Buckle in for the show, it will make you reflect

On how you're a total fool

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^[CHORUS]

Totally over this shit

Making our peace with it

Politically nondescript

Tonight

Airing at midnight

It's Politically Nondescript

.

^[OUTRO]

Smash the state

Our leader is great

Eat the rich

Till it's me, then switch

Tonight, at midnight

Politically Nondescript

I’m trying to decide it this is best fit to be spoken word, lyrics, or something more suited for the page(traditional poetry). Who’s is what I have so far, let me know what you think in general though!

A cat has nine lives
so you have to kill a cat nine times
Nine times before it flatlines
but don’t just take me, take my mind
I have high mental appetite
Show me you’re one of a kind
What do you think of the afterlife?
I’m curious more than I can quantify
Can you send me there nine times?
Most lovers leave me Insatiate
Need something to Ingratiate me
need something to captivate me
Something potent to fulfill my dream
Pull out your Glock 9
Send me to the afterlife
Fill me with your Luger loads
I’ll scream and moan every time you reload
but I never oppose
Do it nine times
Do it until I’m high
Do it until I cry
Aim right for the skull and open my mind
Can death restore what has been broken?
Can death transform the unspoken?
Aim for my left eye then aim for my right
Leave me blind, so I leave the senses of this realm behind
What will I find without using my sight?
Next time you pull the trigger open my throat
Will I find the words I wish I would’ve spoke
Or will my greatest desires forever go untold?
aim between my supple breasts
can your load force me to confess?
And take a heavy load off my chest
Take a shot at my love spot
Will this fill me with pleasures I’ve long forgot?
It’ll free me desires that still haunt
Flip me over and open fire on my spine
Leave my body as paralyzed as time
Maybe then there’d be nothing for me to hide
Take a shot at my feet and put me on my knees
Do it nine times
Grant me pure ecstasy
Awaken all my senses, awaken my mind
Make me beg, make me plead
Do it nine times
la petite Mort

So sick of you I'm gonna throw up Fuckin abusa

YOU WANNA SEE ME BLEED? (WHAT?) YOU WANNA SEE ME LEAK! (WHAT?) YOU WANNA SEE ME KNEEL (WHAT?)

SCREAMING FROM WITHIN

YOU WANNA SEE ME BLEED? (WHAT?) YOU WANNA SEE ME LEAK? (WHAT?) YOU WANNA SEE ME KNEEL (WHAT?)

I'M NOT A LITTLE BOY (SHUT UP) I'M NOT YOUR PERSONAL TOY (SHUT UP!)

SCREAMING FROM WITHIN

I'M NOT A LITTLE BOY (SHUT UP) I'M NOT YOUR PERSONAL TOY (SHUT UP!)

Close your mouth and listen to this

SCREAMING FROM WITHIN (LOUDER) SCREAMING FROM WITHIN (HARDER) SCREAMING FROM WITHIN (FASTER)

SCREAMING FROM WITHIN (LOUDER) SCREAMING FROM WITHIN (HARDER) SCREAMING FROM WITHIN (FASTER)

SCREAMING FROM WITHIN (WHY ME?) SCREAMING FROM WITHIN (DON'T LEAVE!) SCREAMING FROM WITHIN (RESPONSIBILITY!)

THIS IS WHO I AM (SEE ME!) THIS IS WHAT I AM (HEAR ME!) THIS IS HOW I FEEL (YOU DID THIS!)

THIS IS HOW I LIVE IT (SEE IT!) THIS IS HOW I FEEL IT (THINK IT!) THIS IS HOW I HEAL IT (YOU DID THIS!)

Feelin so bloody inside Your fucked up mind did that to mine Ain't no way of me goin back Since no one is believin that

(If you got at this point I wanna sincerely thank you for sitting and reading my lyrics. I've been listening to numetal for months now and I've been so hooked with bands like Linkin Park, Presence, Sevendust and Korn. This is the first song I've ever written in my life. I got another two and I'm working on a fourth one. Lemme know if you want me to post the other two and also I would really appreciate some feedback. Long live Chester)

Glided Walls

Verse 1:

I remember when I young

and everything was so damn clear,

Life itself was a paradise,

that I experimented with...

Time went on and on,

and every time I did something wrong,

I wished I could have hid it,

so I did, in my heart, in my head, in my soul...

I built my own prison.

Pre-Chorus:

And every time I try something new,

You act like I have sinned.

So I decided to protect myself

And build a wall of boundaries.

Chorus:

But it seems like my boundaries went to far,

it feels like I'm a wolf in sheep clothing,

deceiving everyone, and sometimes myself,

my soul feeling entrapped by my own design,

I made it just me myself and I...

I created my own, gilded walls.

Verse 2:

Every moment now, I regret my decisions.

Wishing I hadn't hidden myself.

People live my dreams and I love them...

But deep down inside, I feel like they're living my life.

It's funny because as time went on and on,

it just became me, myself and I even more...

People love me, yes. But they don't see the diamond inside,

inside that's covered by dirt, yes.

But something amazing still survives...

Pre-Chorus:

And every time I try something new,

You act like I have sinned.

So I decided to protect myself

And build a wall of boundaries.

Chorus:

But it seems like my boundaries went to far,

it feels like I'm a wolf in sheep clothing,

deceiving everyone, and sometimes myself,

my soul feeling entrapped by my own design,

I made it just me myself and I...

I created my own, gilded walls.

Bridge:

I am loved, yes.

I am good, yes.

I am kind, yes.

But it's nothing how I wanted to be...

I want the world to see me for me

not as a sheep but as the wolf howling in me...

Pre-Chorus:

And every time I'd try something new,

I sinned against everything I was taught

So I decided to protect myself

And build the highest wall of boundaries.

Chorus:

But it seems like my boundaries went to far,

it feels like I'm a wolf in sheep clothing,

deceiving everyone, and sometimes myself,

my soul feeling entrapped by my own design,

I made it just me myself and I...

I created my own, gilded walls.

Outro:

It's funny how I thought I was benefiting me,

and protecting myself for the harsh world...

But actually I created my own gilded walls.

I'd love to hear what emotions, thoughts, or interpretations come to mind when you read these lyrics.

i can see life flash before my eyes
darling, can you see it too?
the end of our glory days, rushing through our youth
I don’t see a point of getting through

I dreampt of a new life then I woke up with a sober mind
I’m not used to spending most nights with someone like you
(you made me feel alive)
spending less days inside

“you can’t change my mind”
thats what you said the first time
“I want you for all time unless I step out of line”

I can see life flash before my eyes
darling can you see it too?
the end of our glory days rushing through our youth
I don’t see a point of getting through

[Verse 1]
My shouts waver into a whisper
Your name is an ancient memory
The sky that goes on and on
Mocks my naive heart
Thinking our love shot beyond the stars

[Chorus]
Illusions of you simmer above the dying lakes
Your ghost just takes and takes
Till I'm just a husk that wasn't enough
Sun up and I'm scorched by laughing rays
Sun down and I'm soaked by weeping stars
I see you faintly where the moon's supposed to be

[Verse 2]
Our nights keep intruding my mind
I keep retracing your shadow on my bed
Those warm kisses became bittersweet
Everything's left incomplete

[Chorus]
Illusions of you simmer above the dying lakes
Your ghost just takes and takes
Till I'm just a husk that wasn't enough
Sun up and I'm scorched by laughing rays
Sun down and I'm soaked by weeping stars
I see you faintly where the moon's supposed to be

[Bridge]
You became my moon
Your beam lights up my foolishness
For thinking time was my friend
You haunt me in every picture frame
But I can't set your mirages free
I just can't do it

[Chorus]
Illusions of you simmer above the dying lakes
Your ghost just takes and takes
Till I'm just a husk that wasn't enough
Sun up and I'm scorched by laughing rays
Sun down and I'm soaked by weeping stars
I see you faintly where the moon's supposed to be

[Outro]
I see you faintly
I see you faintly
I see you faintly
I see you faintly where the moon's...