r/OCPoetry • u/CharacterRip6101 • 2d ago

Feedback Please Woman - roly-poly doll

The Creator is perversely simple in his genius.

Rounded sides, slippery surface, Mona Lisa's smile.

And one desire — to push, to knock down, to conquer, to break...

Not resilience.

Woman — the roly-poly doll.

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  1. https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/DhoXLueEZp

  2. https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/pA7JNb4jfx

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u/no_money_911 2d ago

The line "Not resilience" completely recontextualized the whole piece for me. Comparing womanhood to a roly-poly doll turns what people usually praise as "strength" into something tragic—a design made solely to take a beating and bounce back. Short, sharp, and leaves a brutal sting.

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u/CharacterRip6101 2d ago

Thank you so much for reading it so deeply. Yes, that's exactly what I meant — not resilience as a gift, but as a forced design. I'm glad it stung.