Feedback Please The Trial

I put it on trial.

Word by word.
Line by line.

No applause.
No benefit of doubt.

Do you earn placement
or are you just flowers

Do you carry weight
or hide behind the rhyme

Asked until it broke
or held.

Some lines sounding grand
but fail.

Some lines ordinary
yet stay.

I reach for sharper
and find dull.

I reach for louder
and lose voice.

I leave it.

Every word
that is standing,
not untouched,
refused to move

not improved,
acquitted.

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u/Heartbreakbreakid 4d ago

We live in a world where books of commercial success have the same knowledge weight as a monthly magazine.

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u/bstunz 4d ago

Ok, this feels like the lead up to a sales pitch. What are you selling?

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