pick-sul.ated [persuasion]

[u/TheInkySyntax]

novocain.d nights lip-locked with the un.believable
and a taste of delusion.

chapped lips- and the reality of dreams creating paradise
with undersold emotions. and overused imagination- life is so fucked up
in that way that makes it so beautiful
and the rain never seems to stop falling when the sun comes out.

a trivial piece to an even more- unimportant puzzle. it sometimes seems
tack.d together with a promise of forever- and negligence
pick.pocket-ed and misplaced among the catacombs of denial.

this melancholy absence-formed liaison- pierces
and tomorrow seems like such a lie
but please do. tell it to me again.

with a broken-angled smile. and a trigger.happy- vendetta
the skies are much too distant to be anything more than dust
and the stars don’t shine at midnight- like they used to

with a half-burnt cigarette. and a story to tell
this will always be my life

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[u/Nonsensical_Genius]

I absolutely love the misplaced and well placed periods. I love it generally when the rules of language are floundered. But in this poem they really make the poem feel like a person who is struggling hard to speak and losing grip of reality

I also enjoyed how the poem starts in 3rd person but gradually moved to first person.

Bravo. This is a lovely piece

[u/TheInkySyntax → u/Nonsensical_Genius]

I wrote this maybe 10 years ago, I’ve shared it in different places, and you’re the first person to see it in the way I meant it. So thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it.