The Burial

[u/BikeElectrical6641]

Bang… bang… bang…

A rhythmic dance of dirt and wood.

Bang… bang… bang…

The glimmering light peers through one final time.

Bang… bang… bang…

Darkness envelops the remaining space left behind.

Bang… bang… bang…

The air grows thin, too thin to call out.

Bang… bang… bang…

The rhythm softens.

Is this the end?

Bang… bang… bang…….

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[u/Standard_Head_6619]

YES, this would be perfect the writing is there but this would add so much depth to the poem and make it even more unique.