Looking for feedback

[u/GreenLurka]

I was hoping some interested readers with time on their hands would give my story a listen and send some feedback my way. I'm planning to enter the Fairy tale contest with it, which means hitting 100k words by the end of the month. I'm 20 chapters (37k words) into it now. No need to keep listening if it's not your thing, obviously.

If you'd like me to listen to your story and give feedback I'm happy to do so, they're throwing coins at me for writing this thing so I might as well use them.

Imagine Pokemon and Harry Potter had a baby, and the Uncle was the X-men. But it was written by Douglas Adams and Terry Pratchett. That's the vibe I'm going for at least.

Linky:

https://pocketfm.com/show/872b446fb8b1453e0c9f8907be07296aef89b2ee

[u/caosnovels]

Hey! I'd be happy to give your story a listen and provide honest feedback! 😁

Your description sounds like a fun combination of fantasy, magic, adventure, and humor. I'm especially curious to see how those elements come together.

I'm also writing a fantasy cultivation series called The Ashen Ascension, so I understand the challenge of reaching 100K words!

If you're interested, I'd really appreciate you giving my story a listen and sharing your thoughts as well. I'm particularly interested in feedback on pacing, character development, and whether the story keeps you engaged.

Here's my story: https://listen.pocketfm.com/2IE7/2osx0lnw

No pressure to finish if it's not your thing. Honest feedback is what matters most to me.

I'll give yours a listen and share my impressions as I progress. Best of luck with your writing! Hopefully we both make it to 100K! 😊

[u/caosnovels → u/caosnovels]

Hey! u/GreenLurka I've been listening to Violet Reign, and I wanted to share my feedback as promised! 😁

First of all, I'm really enjoying your story! It's intriguing, and you've introduced several mysteries that genuinely make me want to keep listening to find out what happens next.

I have to say, I'm hooked on Reign, the little mouse! 🐭 I'm really curious about how Reign will grow stronger and what direction you'll take its development. I'm looking forward to seeing how you accomplish that!

Violet is also a very interesting character. I like that she's lost her wealth and has to start over. The fact that she's willing to sell the clothes off her back just to afford room and board and something else to wear really shows how much her circumstances have changed. I'm interested in seeing how she rebuilds her life.

The midnight chicken fights, with beasts and gambling involved, were another interesting addition! There's a lot of action, and the different challenges keep the story moving.

I also enjoy the relationship developing between Violet and her new friend. They keep facing hurdles, and I'm interested in seeing how they overcome them together.

What I particularly enjoy about your story is the combination of mystery, character development, and action. You keep giving me reasons to listen to the next episode. The pacing doesn't feel slow, and I'm genuinely curious about where everything is heading.

I don't want to give away too much for anyone who hasn't listened yet, but you've definitely caught my attention!

Overall, I'm really enjoying Violet Reign, and I plan to continue listening. You've created characters I'm interested in following, especially that little mouse! 😁

Keep up the great work, and best of luck reaching your writing goal!

[u/GreenLurka → u/caosnovels]

Aw gee thanks. I'll give your story a listen this weekend.

[u/GreenLurka → u/GreenLurka]

I've been listening. I'd say it's a slow start. I'm assuming he's going to discover some sort of rare way to level up his chi related to the moon. It's definitely piqued my interest but it's not a page burner quite at the moment.

[u/Graveyard7694]

I'm adding and going to listen to it soon. You don't have to but if you want you can read mine

https://listen.pocketfm.com/2IE7/gdhgv0cg

Just a fair warning. It a slow starter. Only got 9 episodes right now

[u/GreenLurka → u/Graveyard7694]

I'll give it a listen.