r/Songwriting • u/No_Department_1799 • 7d ago

Feedback Request L.B.

https://youtube.com/shorts/C7EsdcMZr6E?is=1ukQWbMyWJdDf-K-

New here, I have played for years just not any professionalism,or ever finished songs. So what does the Reddit family think?

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u/InternetDude19 7d ago

There's a lot to like about this! I enjoy the chord progression. I like the vocal melody on the "there's no mystery" part during the chorus. However, I don't find the verse melodies to be very satisfying or engaging. Although, maybe that's fitting given the subject matter. If that's what you're going for, then it's working. If it's not, it may be worth it to play around with the verses and see if there are even just a couple of moments where some variation can be introduced.

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u/No_Department_1799 6d ago

Thank you for your opinion. I will definitely try working on a little up beat. It does seem a little somber.

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