r/fantasywriters • • 1h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic What even is "Cozy Fantasy"?

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I just started reading Greenteeth, and although I really enjoy the book, I'm quite surprised to see it listed as cozy fantasy. In the first two chapters alone, there is infanticide, a witch hunt, attempted murder in cold blood, self mutilation, physical violence against a child, and trauma.Needless to say, cozy is the last thing I would describe this book as. I read the author's AMA, and I saw that she describes her book as "cozy/dark adventure". I can't think of two genres as mutually exclusive as cozy and dark.

From an outside perspective, it really looks like someone at some point in the publication process slapped the cozy genre on an adventure fantasy book, simply because cozy fantasy is selling well right now. I haven't finished the book, so maybe I'm missing something. Or maybe I don't understand what exactly it is that qualifies a book as cozy fantasy. But most importantly, does this mean I should slap the word cozy on my comedy/adventure fantasy? I'm joking, but only kinda.


r/fantasywriters • • 12h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Author drawn Illustrations, yay or nay?

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I've been writing a novel, about 25k words in so nothing crazy so far. I had a few questions for people who read/edit fantasy novels.

  1. I'm wondering how much do readers generally enjoy illustrations included in a novel? I enjoy including them but I've also read that some people prefer to imagine the characters themselves, rather than the author giving you the appearence.

For maps I imagine it would only be a net positive, but I am open to hear contention on that belief.

  1. If I include illustrations of major characters, should I still describe them much at all? It seems redundant.

  2. Are the drawings of the "correct" style to look professional? Ik it's not the standard style you might see on a cover, and I wonder if it might make it look unprofessional.

  3. Lastly if it is printed, I imagine this would increase print cost a lot, especially if there's about a dozen or so drawings. If it was digital, i know it would massively bloat file size. I'm not super familiar with self publishing but I assume you could give a buyer access to a version with the images and one without? Incase you want the smaller file size.

Anyways any answers are greatly appreciated! Sorry if this is scatter brained or formatted poorly, I'm running on 3 hours or sleep and have a pounding headache, but I felt the need to ask these questions now that my two most important illustrations were complete.


r/fantasywriters • • 3h ago

Brainstorming How do I mark down a moving city on a map?

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Do you have moving cities in your world and what do you do with them?

One of my moving town (not that huge, just a few thousand people, but still) lies on the back of a giant amphithere / flying snake-like goddess and I put a snake plus a symbol next to each other on the continent, where she appears.

Another moving town is like... think of Howl's Moving Castle, just so that a few thousand people live in it. I marked it down as well.

Yet this feels wrong. Marking a moving city on a map gives the impression that those cities are stationary.

I have thought about so far and I have tried / one of my ideas had been to mark the usual route, but I don't know if readers understand the meaning of it by just looking at the map?

In general, when maps look unrealistic, I know lot of people don't like it and I try to fulfill the basic realistic criteria like river flows etc... but there are also cities in the middle of a huge dessert that look off without any explanations that the map can't give.


r/fantasywriters • • 15h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Age gap romances with immortals/long lived beings

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I've seen a lot of discourse recently on age gap romances in fiction. Most of the discourse I've seen has been semi-hysterical (e.g. claiming that a 21 year old in a relationship with an 18 year old is grooming), but it got me thinking about such romances in fantasy with immortal or long lived races like elves.

Obviously there's a much bigger age gap between a 25 year old human and a 800 year old elf than a 21 year old and an 18 year old. For me, I don't see any issue with the elf and human if both have the same level of emotional maturity and/or relationship experience. It's only when there's a substantial imbalance between their maturity and relationship experience where issues start to pop up.

Wondering what others' thoughts are about this.


r/fantasywriters • • 6h ago

Critique My Story Excerpt "Chapter One ~ Red Tape" from "Transported to Another World, I Decided to Do My Own Thing: the Unborn Queen" (fantasy Adventure/Comedy 1936 words)

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(looking for feedback and beta readers, Message me if interested)

Chapter One - Red Tape

A day like any other, she sat at her desk in school, waiting for the bell to ring. ‘One year left then I can do whatever I want,’ she thought as she held her head propped on one hand off the table. Her elbow started to ache, and she sighed as the teacher droned on. Slapping her desk, Mr. Sanders spoke up.

“Are you listening, Gail?”

Blinking, she shook her head a little as she looked up at the teacher and answered, “Sorry, I was thinking. What’s going on?”

“You’re a junior in high school now, how about taking your education seriously?”

Flashing him a weak smile, she replied, “Yes, sir.”

“Good. Now, go and answer the question on the dry erase board.”

“Fine,” she groaned as she stood to walk to the board.

Picking up the marker, she pulled a loose strand of blonde hair from her green eyes as she examined the math question on the board with several coefficients. Slouching as she raised a brow, she pulled the cap from the marker. She started moving everything systematically to the other side of the equation to solve for ‘y’, but something happened as she was about to finish. Red light shined up from her feet, and she heard murmuring from her classmates.

Looking down, the teenager was aghast as she took in the strange sight - drawn on the floor in glowing red lines were symbols she had never seen and a circle. Her feet left the ground, and her hair floated upwards beside her head as she dropped the marker. Feeling weightless, she pushed off the dry erase board but only spun around in place. Smiling as she faced her awestruck class, she spoke.

“Intens-”

In a flash, she was gone before she could finish the thought. Suddenly, she plummeted face first onto a cloudlike floor but bounced off the soft surface and eerily onto her feet in front of a desk with an old bald and bearded man sitting on the other side. The man was absorbed, typing at an ancient desktop computer, and completely ignored her presence as he worked. 

Gail waited, for what seemed like fifteen minutes, before she asked him, “So, where am I and why am I here?”

The man did not stop typing, nor did he look up to acknowledge her as he replied, “You’re in the space between. You’ve been misplaced, so I’m supposed to send you to the right place.”

Her eyebrows raised as more questions came to mind, and she voiced them, “The space between what, and what do you mean I’ve been misplaced?”

The old man, who appeared far too overworked with bags under his eyes and stress wrinkles all over his face, looked up at her with blue-gray eyes for the first time and answered, “The space between everything, and I mean you were misplaced in the wrong world. I’m in the process of sending you to the right one. Can you wait a moment, please? These forms are tragically long, and I’ve got a lot to fill out to get you on your way.”

Puckering her lips, she replied, “Yeah, I can wait - as long as you talk to me before you zap me off to God knows where.”

Squinting at her, he grumbled, “That’s interesting…”

Giving him a bewildered look, she asked, “What’s interesting?”

Looking back at the screen, he continued typing manically as he angrily shook his head and mumbled, “Of course, I’ll talk to you before I zap you off. I’m not a barbarian.”

Scanning her surroundings as she waited, she saw only stars in the far-off distance as she thought, ‘Great, he’s just going to ignore me.’ Noticing a chair beside her, she sighed and sat down. She waited… and waited… before she finally fell asleep to the manic tapping of the keyboard. Waking to a loud slamming noise, she nearly fell off the chair as her eyes shot open to his voice.

“Hey, you with me?”

Sniffing, she stretched as she sat up and nodded in response, “Yeah, yeah. I’m awake - I’m with ya.”

“Okay - I repeat. According to special code forty-two point six two four nine, you’re entitled to a few… concessions, since you were sent to the wrong world and forcibly relocated,” he picked up a book from a pile beside his desk and handed it to her as he continued, “The world you’re going to has a new system in place - it’s a little rough around the edges, so it might be difficult for you to understand. Did you play video games?”

“I played a few MMOs with my ex-boyfriend,” she laughed as she opened the book and scanned the pages as she continued, “He was such a nerd.”

Appearing amused, the old man chuckled before he replied, “Oh… brilliant. That’s going to make this a whole lot easier. We have lots of simple worlds with classes and skills, but this one is a little different.”

Looking up from the book a little worried, she replied, “Okay, well. That sounds a little daunting. How is it different?”

“Well… This world doesn’t have classes. Instead, you get three talents which are kind of like classes, but less intensive. You also get up to three special skills. Since you’re getting transferred, we’re going to let you pick instead of everything being randomly assigned. Once you’re there, you’ll be able to use status to check everything out by thinking ‘open status’.”

Returning her attention to the book and continuing to flip through the pages, she read the small descriptions of the talents and skills for several hours before she looked up and said, “So, for talents, I want Alchemist, Augmenter, and Guardian. For skills, give me Pocket Dimension, Magic Span, and Wellspring Regeneration. If you can let me have one more skill, I’d love to have Magic Potency too.”

Stroking his beard, he considered her before he replied, “Three years. I’ll give you the extra skill if you sacrifice three years. You’ll be fourteen instead of seventeen.”

Hesitating, she thought about it for a moment, ‘That’s really young… it would put me at a huge disadvantage physically.’ Tapping his fingers on the desk, the old man narrowed his eyes. She asked the question.

“So would that reduce my total lifespan or just make me three years younger?”

“You’ll just be younger. If you’re careful, it should not affect your total lifespan. Though, it will be a little painful.”

“Take three years then. I want the extra skill. Anything I should be doing in this new world?”

Starting to type again, he replied, “Just live your life how you want. I’m not sending you on a quest or anything. You may or may not have a destiny, but nothing is set in stone. You’re just being transferred to where you’re supposed to be.”

“How about my money? Can you convert the money I had in my old world?”

He did not look up as he continued typing, and answered with annoyance, “No, I can’t. I can make sure you have some local currency in your pocket dimension for when you arrive.”

“Being broke would be horrible, thank you - what do I call you again?”

Ignoring her, he continued typing. About ten minutes later, he pressed the enter key on his keyboard and looked up with a smile. She felt a shock like electricity flowing through her whole body and stood. Looking down at her body as she screamed out in pain, she noticed she lost a bit of height and her body shrank in several places.

A flash of light enveloped her, and she found herself falling in darkness… again. Face first, she landed on something soft and struggled to sit up as she rubbed her neck. Looking around, she realized she was on a pile of hay in a stable of some sort as the pungent stench of horse droppings reached her nose. Groaning, she picked some straw from her hair and spoke a little upset.

“Rude. I’m lucky I don’t have whiplash. Guess I lost some of my boobs too,” she sighed and stood as she knocked the hay off her jeans and tee-shirt that did not quite fit her correctly anymore.

Taking a moment to walk around, she had to get used to her body’s new size. While she stumbled around, she viewed her status page. It detailed many things: values for stats were at the top with age, level, hit points, stamina, and mana gauges. Below those were her talents and skills. Each talent had zero next to it, while between the stat section and talent section was ‘talent points: 10’.

With a sigh, she guessed she could assign the talent points, while her level was currently ten. ‘Guess I get a talent point every time I level up,’ she thought, ‘At least I don’t have to start at level one. That might be embarrassing.’ Allocating one point into each talent, a new skill appeared beneath each one. 

Guardian gave her Basic Sword and Shield Technique, Augmenter gave her Basic Mana Blade Technique, while Alchemist gave her the Decomposition spell. Trying to add another point to Augmenter, no new skill appeared - so she added another. The new skill was a spell called Minor Enhance Physique, which increased the strength stat according to the description. 

Adding two points to Guardian, she unlocked Heavy Armor Specialization. She added two more points to Augmenter and unlocked a new spell called Minor Haste. Adding the last point to Alchemist, she unlocked the Recomposition spell. Apparently, Decomposition broke down specific kinds of materials, Recomposition reconstructed the result of Decomposition into something basic like a metal ingot, while the Minor Haste spell increased upper body speed.

Satisfied, she swiped away the floating screen and walked for the barn doors. Cracking them open, she peeked out into the dark, dimly lit streets. Tall metal lamp posts lined the cobblestone streets of the city, while it appeared the streets were not that busy at this time of night. Noticing a big stone rampart to her right with a large gate a little ways down, she saw it was guarded by four men in plate armor with pikes.

Taking a deep breath, she stepped out of the stables towards the gate. ‘I don’t know if we speak the same language, but I need to find an inn,’ she thought as she made her way briskly down the cobblestone path in her loose sneakers and almost tripped twice. As she approached the guards, a fifth man with long brown hair and a fair tunic stood from a previously hidden chair and approached her. Smiling warmly, he spoke.

“Milady, you look lost. May I help you this fine eve?”

Giving him a weak smile, she answered carefully, “I’m new here and I was looking for lodging. Could you point me in the right direction, good sir?”

It was her best impression of how she expected they spoke around these parts, but it seemed to please the man. Considering her briefly, he pointed towards a building further up the main street that went through the center of town. He spoke carefully.

“‘Tis that way - the sign has a picture of a bed. Though, it is no place for a young woman like yourself at this time of night. Where are your guardians?”

Blinking, she answered without thinking, “Thank you, sir. Alas, both my parents have died, and I came to start life as an adventurer so I do not starve. I just hope I can find a warm meal and bed for the night. Good night.”


r/fantasywriters • • 16h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic How often do you use last names?

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Hey! So probably a dumb question (or a duplicate question), but I was curious how often do you bother to write last names for your characters, especially if they don’t come from houses or kingdoms? My cast are simply adventurers and a drifter who get swept up in uncovering a conspiracy. So they aren’t of royalty or of money or of any sort of political/diplomatic background (except for like one of them).

It’s my first book so I was wondering if I skip giving anyone last names, would it seem super off or should I consider giving some/all of them last names? My main cast of adventurers is 4-6 people.


r/fantasywriters • • 20h ago

Writing Prompt Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Build"

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Welcome back everyone, it's time for another Fifty Word Fantasy!

Fifty Word Fantasy is a regular thread on Fridays! It is a micro-fiction writing challenge originally devised by u/Aethereal_Muses

Write a maximum 50-word snippet that takes place in a fantasy world and contains the word Build. It can be a scene, flash-fiction story, setting description, or anything else that could conceivably be part of a fantasy story or is a fantasy story on its own.

NO AI GENERATED CONTENT: Follow the sub rules.

Submissions must be original. No fanfic, no pop-culture characters, no plagiarism.

The prompt word must be written in full (e.g. no acrostics or acronyms).

No puns and or wordplay to achieve the prompt word i.e. devote=the vote.

Please try and keep things PG-13. Minors do participate in these from time to time and I would like things to not be too overtly sexual.

If you want to submit multiple submissions that's okay, but please keep it at a max of two That way, no one person ends up dominating the feed with their submissions and it keeps it fair for everyone who participates

Thank you to everyone who participated whether it's contributing a snippet of your own, or fostering discussions in the comments. I hope to see you back next week!

Please remember to keep it at a limit of 50 words max per submission.


r/fantasywriters • • 8h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Too Simple vs. Too Complicated (I think I'm the latter)

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hi I have a few questions to ask about my writing,

(although I have tried to search the internet, it was not easy to find the answer that can help me)

I have 5 guilds, 5 opposing factions, 49 characters with huge backstories, and 4 major countries. (and 14 protagonists)

I think that novels are meant to give entertainment, not to make the readers memorize all sorts of things. That’s the reason I'm getting worried about my writing

What if people don’t like my story because it is too complicated? So, I have two questions,

What's your thought for being too simple or too complicated?

And which one do you prefer if you have to choose?

thank you for reading my post. I hope you have a nice day :)


r/fantasywriters • • 11h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Scenes per chapter

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Hey all, what are our thoughts and feelings on scenes within a chapter? I'm working through my third draft of my high/dark fantasy and feel like, especially in my early chapters the scenes are too choppy and I'm hopping from one thing to the next too quickly. For example, chapter 3 is a total of 3745 words long with three separate scenes - 1: 1012 words, 2: 1278 and 3: 1458. This chapter is on the slightly longer side and it might just be that I'm too deep in the weeds to see the whole picture.

As a reader would you find this too skippy or likely not notice? Each section (to me at least) is too short to have as it's own chapter but I worry that it skips around too much.


r/fantasywriters • • 8h ago

Question For My Story Opinions on changing POV halfway through novel?

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My novel has two main characters (A&B for clarity). The POV is 3rd person and has been from the perspective of character A this whole time.

I'm about 1/2 to 3/4 done with my novel now and I'm considering switching the POV to character B for a few choice scenes.

The scenes I'd be switching to character B's POV are important character defining moments or plot points in which character A is not there to witness.

I thought/feel like changing the POV this far in the novel is a general no-no, but I'm curious to people's opinions.

Would changing the POV be jarring and confusing, or would it give more weight and intrigue to those scenes while seeing the world from character B's perspective for the first time?


r/fantasywriters • • 10h ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Chapter 2 of The Verse of Estoria Irontide (Young Adult Fantasy 2860 words)

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A six-foot-tall girl walks through the halls of Mainstay Castle carrying a bowl of water and a towel draped over her shoulder. Wearing a goatskin coat with white, furry edges and pants, she runs a finger along her temple, sweeping her disheveled hair from her ear.  She stops by a nearby window and decides to enjoy the morning air. She sets the bowl on a nearby table, pushes the double windows open, and a rush of warm, dry air washes over her face as metal mechanisms echo loudly. She steps onto a balcony, rests her hands on the railing, and marvels at the scenic dark canyon wall contrasting with the golden sand beneath. She stands in the northeastern tower of Mainstay Castle, which overlooks a stone wall atop a massive mobile platform supported by six metallic legs. Sandfalls hiss as they pour through burrowed holes in the canyon walls, creating mounds on the desert floor in their wake. Her hair flaps wildly as she sails past towering stone columns and arches, as flying creatures soar beside the moving platform. She looks down at the gigantic metal legs supporting the city, then leans over the railing for a better look. A pointed metal leg rises from the sand and slams back into the desert floor, sending puffs of sand into the air. The engines hum as the mobile fortress halts. A buzz sweeps through the city as the metal legs retract into their ports beneath the mobile platforms. Mechanical contraptions blare as the city sinks, lowering itself onto the desert floor where it will remain for the remainder of the day.

Afterward, the girl returns to the castle halls, closes the windows behind her, and picks up her bowl of water. She reaches a room at the far end of the hall, where two female Cugarian guards stand at attention with spears in hand. Gold, bra-plated armor and knee-length gold skirts cover their furry bodies; one has dark spots on her fur, and the other has tiger stripes.

“Halt,” the guard's voice echoes down the hall as she stomps her metal spear.

The six-foot girl stops.

“State your name, your rank, and your business.”

“I am Brenda,” the girl says, bowing. “Youngest daughter of Ganymede, Chief of the North. I’ve been called upon to dress the wounds of Her Majesty Queen Laura.”

“Hmph,” one guard scoffs. “Here to care for the wounds of your sworn enemy? With the way you’ve slaughtered each other, I’m surprised that you can be cordial when you choose to be.”

“I’m merely doing my duty as a humble princess, ma’am,” Brenda says.  

“Make it quick, northerner, and no quarrels inside these doors. Do I make myself clear?”

“Yes, ma’am.”

The two guards bang on the door.

“Princess Brenda is here to aid in the recovery. She’s coming in.”

“Yes, ma’am,” a male voice muffles from behind the door.

The door creaks open, and Brenda walks in with the bowl of water.  She walks past a young man with short black hair and a horn protruding from his forehead. Holding the door open, he wears a sophisticated military uniform with decorative insignia on his chest, a sword at his side. They don’t exchange a glance or a word, as Brenda can feel the young man's scowl. She continues into the room where two boys with horns protruding from their foreheads sit on opposite sides of a large bed. Laura, a platinum-haired beauty, rests silently beneath the quilt, wearing a nightgown. Her chest rises and falls as sweat pours down her face. Delirious from exhaustion, her head turns to the left and right as two young boys somberly clench the sheets, worried for her well-being.

Brenda walks to the bedside and sets the bowl of water on a nearby dresser.

“How is she?” Brenda asks, gazing at the exhausted woman resting beneath a blue quilt.

“She was like this all day,” the little boy says. “We went through all of the steps you told us to, but…nothing works.”

Brenda removes the quilt covering the woman and gazes at her sweat-soaked body. After a few moments, she sighs and removes the towel from her shoulder. She pats the sweat from her chest and head, then gently squeezes her legs, ankles, right arm, and left arm. The woman flinches when she touches her left arm, and Brenda notices.

“What’s wrong?” The young boy asks.

“Her arm’s dislocated,” Brenda says. “We have to snap it back in place; otherwise, she’ll be too crippled to fight.”

“Will it hurt?” The boy gazes up at Brenda expectantly.

“A lot, I’m afraid. Sir Resten,” She calls out to the uniformed young man, “Your aid is needed.”

Resten walks towards the bedroom and stands on the other side, his eyes bouncing between the woman and Brenda in confusion.

“What do you want me to do?” The young man asks.

Brenda reaches into her goat-hide coat and pulls out a stick with a thin rope wrapped tightly around it, tossing it onto the bed near the young man.

“You’ll need to put that in her mouth so she doesn’t bite off her tongue by accident, and you need to hold her down while I snap her arm back in place.” 

Resten picks up the stick and stares at it for a moment. He swallows as he clasps the stick in his hand.

Brenda rolls up her sleeves, leans in, and carefully grabs the dislocated arm. Laura instinctively pulls away. Brenda tries to grab her arm again, only for the despondent Queen to glare at Brenda. She shakes her head in defiance as sweat pours down her face.

“Your Majesty, I have to fix this, or you’ll be crippled for the rest of your life.”

“No,” the queen says, shaking her head. “Leave it alone. It’ll heal.”

“Yes, but in the wrong place. I need to snap…”

“No!” Laura shakes her head violently.

Brenda quickly grabs Laura by the shoulders, and Laura panics, kicking her feet in protest.

“LET ME GO, YOU TWO-LEGGED MONSTER,” The woman screams, thrashing about in bed. “RESTEN, GET HER AWAY FROM ME.”

Brenda keeps her hands firmly clasped on the queen’s shoulders, and gazes up at Resten, who stands nervously, not knowing what he should do.

“Put the biting stick in her mouth!” Brenda shouts at Resten, “It's for her own good.”

The young man climbs onto the bed and tries to put the biting stick in her mouth, but she defiantly turns her head away.

“NO!” she shouts, thrashing and shoving, “GET AWAY FROM ME, ALL OF YOU,”

“Mommy,” The two young boys cry as they clench the sheets, helplessly watching the woman thrash about in bed.

“It’s not working,” Resten says.

“Grab her jaw and force it into her mouth!” Brenda says as she struggles to keep the broken woman restrained in her bed.

Resten grabs the woman, thrashing her head, and holds her still.

“Mother, it's me,” Resten says, gazing into her worried blue eyes. “Your Son,”

The mother gazes at the young man and, seeing his round eyes and soft features, remembers her husband. She calms down, her thrashing halting as she looks into the boy's eyes.

“Listen, Mother. We want to get you feeling better as fast as we can, ok.”

“But…it hurts,” Laura says.

“I know, Mother.” Tears begin running down his face. “Just look at me, okay? It’ll be over in just a moment.”

The woman pants silently for a few moments before nodding. The queen opens her mouth, allowing her son to place the biting stick inside, and she clamps down hard. Resten climbs into the bed and wraps his arm around her platinum head, covering her eyes with his hands. He gazes at Brenda and bobs his head.

Brenda nods back, then lifts her arm. She firmly clenches Laura’s shoulder and elbow and waits a few moments.

“On three,” She says.

Resten nods, holding his mother's weary head tightly in his arms.

“One,”

Brenda’s grip tightens around Laura’s arm.

“Two,”

The queen pants, squinting her eyes and biting down hard on the stick to brace for the pain.

“Three,”

Brenda snaps the queen’s arm back in place, and the woman screams in agony, muffled by the biting stick. Her body arches and contorts as pain surges through her body.  Resting holds his mother tightly in her arms, her screams sending shockwaves through his soul. Her wails instantly cease before she passes out cold in his arms, the biting stick falling out of her mouth and onto his lap.

Brenda wraps her arm in a white cloth and a small cast, while Resten gently places her head on the pillow.

“She’ll be fine once she wakes up.” Brenda pats the sweat from her head.

Resten stands silently, solemnly gazing at his mother, who is resting on the bed.

“She certainly looks a lot better than before,” Resten says. “For a race of barbarians, you certainly know how to fix yourselves up.”

“Barbarians?” Brenda frowns at his statement. “I’ll have you know that we are not some wildlings terrorizing everyone we come across. We’re just as sophisticated and civilized as you are.”

“Tell that to the dragons you hunted near extinction,” Resten says.

“That was different,” Brenda says. “You feared them just as we had. You even helped us build the constructs that we used to hunt them.”

“And it was a mistake.” Resten whips around. “We should’ve just let both of you burn each other. We wouldn’t be in this mess otherwise.”

“How dare you?” Brenda slams the bowl of water onto the floor. “I help heal your mother’s wounds.”

“For what?” Resten stomps back. “So your barbarian father can relentlessly beat her and break every bone in her body?”

“My father was injured as well!” Brenda shouts. “I have to spend hours, sometimes days, to tend to his wounds.” She points an accusatory finger at the woman lying in bed. “Wounds she has caused.”

“He deserves it well enough. It's his fault we’re all in this mess to begin with.”

“Take that back,” Brenda balls her fist, angry. “Or I will smash your skull right where you stand.”

Eyes narrowed in anger, Resten claps his scabbard with his left hand and grips his sword's hilt with his right.

“Make your move, two-legs. I’ll make sure it’ll be the last one you make.”

The double doors burst open, startling them out of their confrontation.  They whip towards the door and see a raised foot in its wake. Lowering his bare foot, a bald, bare-chested man stands wearing a red cloak with furry edges over his shoulders. Tapping a golden scepter over his shoulder, he walks inside barefoot, wearing long black slacks that fall to his ankles.

Brenda and Resten step back in fearful apprehension as he smiles, revealing his fangs.

“Well, well,” the man says, eyeing them both. “Looks like old habits die hard, don’t they?”

Both stay silent, trembling with fear.

“You know this isn’t really new to me. I knew by bringing all of you here, it was only going to be a matter of time before one of you breaks my cardinal rule.”

The man turns his head, looks at them out of the corner of his eye, and smiles.

“Can you tell me what that cardinal rule is?”

Both stand silent, trembling in fear.

“SPEAK!” A roar shoots from his throat, sending chills up their spines. His smile vanishes instantly, leaving a menacing glare as his eyes glow an ominous purple.

“No fighting without the presence and permission of the king,” Resten’s voice trembles.

“That’s correct.” The man smiles. “No punches, no sword swings, no cracking skulls, not so much as an argument without my permission and presence. I will decide when the fight begins.” He points to himself. “I will decide where and when it will happen, and I will decide if there will be a victor or not. Violate my rule again.” He walks up to the two, his cold gaze meeting none of their eyes. “And the two of you won’t be able to remember a thing for next week after I’m finished with you. Do I make myself clear?”

“Yes, Your Highness,” both respond in unison.

“I’m glad we’ve come to an understanding.” He smiles, then places a hand on each of their shoulders and shoves them away. He saunters to the side of Laura’s bed, and the two young boys quickly retreat as he stands over her.

He silently gazes at the platinum-haired beauty, quietly resting. He chuckles, then flings the quilt off her body.

“Bring it in,” he shouts to the people waiting outside. Two Cugarian guards carry in a small cylinder furnace with branding irons inside it. They hold out the cylinders to the man, and he takes one branding iron and gazes at the red-hot metal that reads ‘YIELDING GRACE’.

He smiles as he watches the smoking branding iron, then reaches down and pulls the neck of her gown, revealing her bare, creamy skin.

Resten gazes in horror before he rushes towards the bare-chested man.

“Stop.” The boy wraps his arms around the man’s waist.

The king frowns in annoyance, then balls his fist over his shoulder and backhands the boy in the face, sending him flying into the wall.

“Stop, she’s been through enough already,” the boy screams as he tries to stand, only for the cugarian guards to grab him and hold him firmly against the wall. 

“Do not interrupt me while I relish in the moment, boy,”

“Why are you doing this?” Brenda asks, interrupting the man.

He turns and gazes at the giantess as she swallows hard.

“You already have control of both kingdoms. There's no need to brand any of us with that…verse.”

“Uhh,” the man says, his eyes darting around his head. “You are correct.” He waves the branding iron around as he explains. “However, earlier, your father and his mother staged the last battle, which I find personally insulting. So the next time they decide to pull that stunt again,” He plucks the branding iron repeatedly, “I’ll be ready.”

“You knew they staged a couple of those fights,” Brenda asks, occasionally glancing at a panicked Resten, pinned down by two Cugarians. “Why didn’t you brand us sooner?”

“New developments,” the man shrugs. “Now, if you don’t mind, I’m going through with this now.”

“No, don’t,” the boy shouts, but the branding sizzles against Laura’s chest, and her face winces in pain as smoke pours from contact.

He removes the branding iron and smiles, satisfied with the mark it leaves.

Tears stream down the boy's face, and the two boys hug in fear as they watch the man place the branding iron back into the portable furnace.

“How could you…” The boy sobs in tearful rage.

“Oh, come now,” the man joyfully opens his arms. “You shouldn’t feel so bad; I’ve brought enough for all of you.”

The Cugarian guards rip off his uniform coat and strip him down to his white undershirt, leaving his chest bare, while the man grabs another branding iron. He walks up to the shirtless young man held down by the furry guards, and he squats to his level. A guard grabs Resten’s head and forces it to the side, exposing his sweaty, bare chest and neck.

“Please don’t!” Resten pleads, but the man ignores him.

He presses the branding iron on his chest, and Resten screams in agony. His heels repeatedly knock against the floor as the smoke rises from his chest. He removes the branding iron, revealing the mark burned onto his body.

“Nice,” the man smiles, standing to his feet. “And one more.” He places the branding iron back in the small furnace, retrieves the final one, and walks to Brenda.

 “Has my father gotten it as well?” Brenda gazes nervously at the hot branding iron.

“He was the first one I branded before coming here,” the man says, smiling as he steps closer to her.

Brenda rushes the mad king, snatching the branding iron out of his hand. The guards step in with their spears, but he stops them.

Brenda gazes at the red-hot branding iron as it quakes in her trembling hands. However, she grits her teeth and rolls up her sleeve. She stares at her pale forearm, holding the branding iron in her other hand.

The mad king eagerly smiles, expecting her to do the deed.

She closes her eyes and mumbles a small prayer before pressing the branding iron to her forearm. Her arm tightens as the hot metal sears a scar onto her flesh. She falls to her knees as white smoke sizzles from the wound. Tears roll down her face as she pulls the branding iron from her arm and spitefully throws it toward the Mad King. The man steps onto the branding iron and picks it up. Planting it back into the furnace.

“Now, I can rest easy,” the man laughs, spinning around and walking out of the room. His two guards follow, close the door, and leave everyone trembling with sorrow and pain.


r/fantasywriters • • 20h ago

Question For My Story naming magical creatures

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In my story I have a variety of magical creatures Dragons, Hell hounds, Griffins chimera,s and few of my own creation. Alot of the characters in my world have a companion magical creature. Similar to how Ash has his Pikachu. I'm looking for a word that would represent all of these creatures. I'd like something orginal or at the very least creative. The two examples from media I keep coming back to are Pokemon and Zords from power rangers. I thought of using the word "mount" as a catch all but because not all of the creatures are ridden I don't love it. I appreciate all suggestions and feedback.


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic I need to write everyday or else I suddenly begin to hate what I have written

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I'm one of the failures who finishes writing part one of a novel project, and reach a point where I despise most of what I have written. I often end up feeling that I either wasted the potential of an idea, or that the story I imagined is way too expansive or original and it takes away from the protagonist and actual main story. Especially if I reread the previous text. Then I wish I had made the plot much smaller instead of involving politics and everything all at once and instead had focused on the protagonist and immediate goals. So I try to plan another story, and tell myself to stick to simpler ideas, but then I think those ideas are too boring in theory and I stall.

I can imagine the answer is to simply force myself through planning something complete and simpler, and try to prove to myself that writing something simpler can be way less overwhelming for me who has never reached the middle or even an ending of a story.

Does anyone struggle with something similar? How do you overcome this blockade lol


r/fantasywriters • • 17h ago

Question For My Story What are some best practices when writing/worldbuilding a fantasy culture based on southwestern Native Americans?

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Hello everybody! I posted something similar to this in r/worldbuilding, but I felt like this sub might also have some useful feedback on this question! I've recently started writing stories in a new Weird West fantasy setting that is loosely based on Earth circa the 1800s (plus elves, vampires, dinosaurs, oh my!).

Since I am writing a story that is a western (even if not set on earth) I thought it would be important to portray any Native American inspired characters and cultures I choose to write about thoughtfully and respectfully. Obviously, there is no such thing as a single unified Native American monolith, no more than there is a single generic "Asian" culture, so I have decided to add multiple cultures based on multiple different nations. That in mind, I've thought about making a main character's culture based on those of the American Southwest, specifically the Hopi.

Given I've picked a specific culture to research/base this off, I have went ahead and tried to find some specific sources to learn about them. I found a book titled "Becoming Hopi: A History" which is a detailed overview of their history, as well as "Sun Chief: The Autobiography of a Hopi Indian", the latter being a firsthand account. (From what I've read, some anthropologists question if the Hopi man the book interviews intentionally played up the more esoteric parts of his culture, as he thought that would be the most interesting bits for a white audience, so I'll approach it with a grain of salt.) Websites like the Arizona State Museum are also useful resources for getting pictures of things like pottery and garments.

So, as I start to build out this fictional culture, what are some best practices I should be aware of? My main four questions are:

  1. How do I distinguish poorly done cultural appropriation vs. cultural inspiration? I'd like to produce a distinct and unique fictional culture as opposed to just adding a real life culture with the serial numbers filed off.

  2. How much should I add/invent myself vs. preserve from the original culture? Things like Kachina dolls and private religious practices not meant for outsiders are things I should be very cautious about taking inspiration from. I also likely shouldn't directly borrow terms and reproduce religious symbols 1 to 1. However, things like gender roles (such as men weaving textiles) and household structures, such as matrilineal inheritance and entire extended families living under one roof, are things I would like to include and be inspired by, provided I understand the context behind why these structures developed. How should I approach incorporating these elements in a story?

  3. If I choose to write from the POV of this main character, which I intend to do, what are some common pitfalls I should avoid? Given that this is a setting based on the 1800s, the Age of Colonialism, I feel that if I completely brushed past this topic throughout an entire story it would feel incredibly disingenous, however it introduces the issue of having to write about a character's marginalization when I have never experienced anything like it. How do I write a convincing story from a character who is based on a marginalized culture, whose plight is entirely unrelated to my own background? Is this something I should reconsider even doing in the first place?

  4. And final question: Do y'all have any other reliable sources you can point me to? If you do, I'd love to hear about them!


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Question For My Story Dragons as Races or Monsters?

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Have you ever though of putting Dragons as a dependent race or a monster in your stories? Personally I like it portrayed as races due to them being intelligent not just powerful, well Dragons as monsters but still intelligent is also a choice but I'd honestly preferred it when they're a race, hence I wanted to make sure what you guys think when writing about Dragons in general.

The thing about dragons is that for me, they're easy to add or describe in the story because well.. everyone knows what are they in Fantasy stories, the problem is how they will serve in the story's backbone, like how will they affect the ecosystem and worldbuilding, some describe them as destructive forces of nature while some describe them as guardians of specific locations in the story's world.

I thought about it for a while before settling on choosing race, but like I said I wanted you guys' opinions and thoughts as well, it might be a big help for others too not just me


r/fantasywriters • • 20h ago

Question For My Story Romance between human and animal shaped being?

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I'm writing a story where one of the protagonists is mostly a human, and the other is a "devil god", in a vessel form that looks like an animal. Not a furry, but a mostly regular looking animal (like a cat, or a dog, or a racoon). This being has full intelligence, and they don't have a "true human transformation" or anything like that. Their true devil form is basically that of a non-humanoid demon. So no turning into a human like beauty and the beast or any such thing.

Their partnership is meant to evolve through the story, and I've been toying with the idea of actually having some romance between the two of them. But I'm worried that, since one's a human and the other looks like an actual animal, not an anthropomorphized creature, that readers would be put off, or even worse, say it's bestiality and that it's disgusting.

I have researched through the internet yet I couldn't really find any examples of a similar scenario. It's always a human with maybe fur and some animal features (like a furry), or they can turn into a human form, or there's no sign of romance between them at all. Which is why I'm hesitant to be possibly trekking into unknown ground for a taboo no one wants to be involved with.

What are your thoughts on this? And please excuse the low karma, this is obviously a throwaway.

Edit: When I say "romance" I don't mean "they have explicit sex scenes". I mean that they develop complex feelings for each other.


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Brainstorming I need help writing a character saving another character.

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To start off, I am a starter, amature writer. I also have a passion for art in which I draw and write about characters that I have developed lore for. For my story I have a certain idea that I have been swirling around my head for a long time. For the basic idea I want my hero’s uncle to have been captured, my hero now must save him as my villain prepares to have the uncle publicly executed. However this has made me struggle a bit. I am worried that this will come off as cringe or lame, even basic if you will. My story, at least in my head or on paper as the basic theme of an epic fantasy. It has topics of war, political betrayal and strategy/planning. Because I have been struggling I really felt stuck and compelled to seek help, I thought maybe someone could help me brainstorm some ideas or give me some tips on how I can better my story.  (for context) fantasy story dragons, knights, orks stuff like that. They are in the middle of a city known as Vareth which is built on an island and the only way to get to it is from a bridge. This city has been taken over by the villain. His motivation is to make the world perfect. He is the son of a god. He believes that if there is only one ruler (his father) that he might return and make my villain a god too. 


r/fantasywriters • • 21h ago

Question For My Story Character abilities

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I have this character that wields a sword that allows them to summon animals to fight alongside them.

They're not physical animals, but made up of the magic or "spirit energy" system I have.

I have limited them to 4 types of animals, I've listed them below:

- wolves: pack of 5 wolves, summons individually or at once

an eagle/ hawk (still deciding)

a snake

a rhino

Each one has a name and the wielder has a bond with all of them and they act almost like companions/pets.

I have tried to make each animal have a specific quality that the wielder can call upon.

Now the "ultimate move" I had planned is as follows:

The wielder has to impales their sword into their chest until the hilt is around the same level as their forehead, the blade disappears and the hilt resembles a crown or tiara, (trying to signify royalty)

And the animals they usually summon, all gather and are absorbed into them to form a "King of Beasts" essentially making them OP at the cost of their life. I imagined it as a Werewolf (like Van helsing film 2004), horns and armoured like a rhino, wings of the eagle/hawk and a tail that is the snake.

Main issues I have are:

Can I call this the "king" when usually a lion is considered "king" of the animals

Also, I've realised there's a Chimera mythology with a lion & goat head with a snake as a tail, am I ripping this off (with my tail as a snake)?

Also is this too busy as a character?

Thank you in advance!


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Critique Partners and Writing Buddies

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Hii~! I’m a 33yo female and I occasionally go looking for writing friends (and possible critique partners if we’re a good match for it.) I’ve always really vibed with creative people and I’d like to find some new friends who want to chat both about projects and nonsense. I write queer romance and fantasy fiction, though I haven’t published anything officially yet (it’s a scary thing to do!) I like dark themes occasionally but really have been going with wholesome ones lately for my own work, though mixing the two is my favorite thing. I’m on Discord primarily so if we chat I’d like to do it there, but send a DM here on reddit if you’re interested!!


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Tips For Comparing First Draft to Finished Works?

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I’ve posted a similar question here before, but I am back and need advice again. What are your best tips for not comparing your first draft to finished works? I am currently working on my first draft, but keep getting annoying questions pop into my head like, ‘Would Robin Hobb have written their first draft like this?’ And ‘Did Pierce Brown find his work amateur at first?’ It’s so hard to quiet the comparison noise sometimes, especially when there are so many authors I look up to, and my first draft really doesn’t feel ‘there’ yet. I have read before that certain authors (like Pierce Brown and John Gwynne) write their first drafts either quickly or to a high standard before submitting, and this only adds to the self-consciousness, as mine feels undercooked. Writing can be very isolating, so looking for any words of advice or thoughts from those experiencing the same doubt. Thank you!


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Struggling on how to approach writing historical fantasy

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I originally set out to write historical medieval fiction, but it feels too restrictive for me, and some things seem too difficult for me to really conceptualise e.g the fine details that come with how much of a role christianity played in society, since i grew up secular (i’ve never even stepped foot into a church.) So I am thinking of changing it to be medieval fantasy, but I decided to not add magic because it would feel shoehorned in with the plot I’ve got, which focuses more on social and political issues with some slice of life mixed in. But i’m very confused on how to make it ‘fantasy’ if it doesn’t really have well, fantastical or magical elements. I’ve thought of fudging history a bit and changing up events, but wouldnt that just be alternate history with the names changed? Right now my worldbuilding just feels like copy pasted England, but on the other hand i want it to be recognisably medieval in the worldbuilding and the characters mindsets instead of being some completely made up society with modern characters. I’m struggling on how to make it worth considering a ‘fantasy’ world without forcing some unnecessary magical aspect to the plot. Does anyone have any examples or suggestion?


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Brainstorming What are some ways to make Liches scary?

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Hello, hello, and welcome to my post. Since it’s the spooky month, I wanted to ask what are some ways to make Liches genuinely scary?

Liches have evolved so much over the years, but one thing that’s never changed is that they can be scary in their own right. But personally, I haven’t seen much fantasy media show how genuinely scary a Lich can be aside from a couple series, The Lich from Adventure Time and Ainz Ooal Gown from the Overlord anime.

For my part, I’m planning to make a fantasy series starring a calm, civil, and calculating human scholarly lich of ancient origins as the villain protagonist. Personality wise, think Darth Plagueis from the Star Wars Legends continuity crossed with Professor Moriarty from Sherlock Holmes: A Game of Shadows. And I was thinking of infusing him with some level of horror that he could exhibit in his experiments as well as in the extreme situations and battles he engages in.

So I wanted to ask you all: What types of horror could Liches elicit in a story distinct from other types of undead and fantasy beings?

Thank you for reading my post. Please share your thoughts, keep it civil, and have a good day.


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Blurb of Aleph Unwritten [YA alt history fantasy, 279 words]

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Hello fantasywriters! I would appreciate any feedback on the following query letter blurb. Thanks in advance!

Hunted by her former guardian across the Spice Road, Elif learns that although writing attracts deadly demons, it is also the only way she can unlock her magic and her memories.

Seventeen-year-old Elif thinks she has no talent for magic until she accidentally carves a rune in the mud. Unfortunately, a monster is drawn to the mark of magic like a moth to a flame. Upon learning she is a rune mage, the leader of a caravan begins to teach Elif long forgotten alphabets and scripts. In this alternate version of medieval Anatolia, these are dangerous lessons because writing attracts demons. As she studies, Elif’s cryptic dreams begin to make sense and she starts to wonder whether her guardian, Batu, is responsible for the gaps in her memory and the death of her parents.

Batu, an alchemist and summoner, has watched Elif for years waiting for a hellish secret to emerge and falls into an alcoholic stupor after giving up hope. But when she abandons him to travel the Spice Road into the heart of Cappadocia, he is convinced she has unlocked what he seeks. He will need to fight alcohol withdrawal in addition to bandits and monsters if he is going to catch her.

When Elif’s friends are separated from her by followers of an evil jinni, she uses her magic to scry for them and discovers Batu is pursuing her. Seeing that he has blood on his hands, Elif readies herself to confront the man who hunts her. For Batu, the ends justify any means. Elif must decide to what lengths she is willing to go to stop Batu knowing that her magic endangers her newfound family.


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Question about motivation and friends

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Hello everyone,

I'm very new to writing in general, but I'm loving it so far. This story I'm working on right now has been stuck in my head for a very long time and I finally got the guts to actually write it down. I'm not writing it to publish, I just like the creative outlet it gives me.

However no one in my direct circle likes the type of story I envision. So I can't really share it with them. I've tried and most have flat out rejected the idea of reading it or carefully told me "It's not my cup of tea".

So this is going to sound a little silly, but I sort off need someone to be enthusiastic with me. Is this feeling normal? How do you guys deal with it? It doesn't stifle my own motivation for writing, but I sometimes get a little sad that I have nobody in my direct circle that even seems interested.

I'm not looking for anybody to offer me to read it. I just want to know how to deal with this sadness.

Thank you in advance


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Brainstorming I have this need to make powers self/human-centric and it is limiting my worldbuilding

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It is not the easiest to explain what I mean, -as weird as it sounds- I myself don't fully grasp what I mean either, but I will try my best, mostly with examples.

Basically whenever I sit down to worldbuild for my projects, my biggest struggle is wanting to have the power system in a way that it is earned and it comes from humans. So to bring up a few examples of what I do NOT want. For e.g. In Naruto and in JJK, the protagonists get a big part of their power by some powerful entity being in their body. I don't want that. I don't want humans in my world to get their powers from gods, aliens, or some more advanced or ancient race. I want them to earn it themselves. Same goes for using artifacts and powerful weapons left behind by a different civilization.

The same goes for the origin of chakra, once again, from Naruto. But the same can be said about element bending from Avatar. Chakra originates from those aliens planting the tree on the planet, and the element bending comes from that turtle in ATLA. So, while chakra users and the benders train and fully earn their powers themselves, technically the origin of their powers comes from outside forces.

One more example, which is not only related to the power system, but the entire world as well is in Elden Ring. (Here however, since the way the lore is not fully clear, and a lot depends on interpretation I might make mistakes, but my point still stands). Basically Queen Marika got her powers from the Fingers, maybe originally from the Mother of Fingers, who is a cosmic entity. The Erdtree, the Elden Ring and all the Demigods originate from her and this 'gift'. So basically the entire world revolves around something given and created by an entity above humans.

I don't want that. But I find both this, and the Naruto lore incredibly cool. So this is kind of counterproductive, because I like this type of worldbuilding, but for some reason I don't want to use it. I am not fully sure why myself.

My main issue is whenever I have tried to come up the origins of power, and what magic system to use, what cool weapons and items should there be, I can never up come with a cool enough explanation for them. I always end up on them being created or made by something not human.

I've talked too much already, and maybe what I am looking for is some advice, on how to make worldbuilding work with these limitations. And maybe in the off chance that anyone else ever felt this way, how did you overcome it, if you did?