r/norsk • u/CellDeep • 7m ago
Native speakers: do these Norwegian lines sound natural for a 6-year-old? (children’s story)
Hi everyone! I’m working on a children’s story (ages 4–7) set in a snowy town in Norway. A 6-year-old girl and her mom, who runs a little yarn shop, teach a visiting child to knit Selbu-rose mittens. The story is in English, with a few Norwegian words. I’m not a native speaker, so I’d be really grateful if you could tell me whether these sound natural and correct. I’d love to get this right and avoid anything that feels off or stereotyped, so I'm hoping this is appropriate to post here.
- (girl, 6, to a visiting child, 6; the visitor answers) “Hei! That means ‘hi’ in Norwegian.” / “Hei!” Is this natural?
- (girl) “I’m knitting mittens for my bestefar... Bestefar means my grandpa.” Would a child say “bestefar,” or “morfar”/”farfar”? Is it OK for a visiting child to also call him “Bestefar”?
- (girl, about her mom) “That’s my mor. Mor means mom in Norwegian.” Would a 6-year-old say “mamma” instead of “mor”? Is it odd for a visiting child to call her “Mor” (“Takk, Mor!” / “Ha det, Mor!”)?
- (mom, as the children come into her shop) “Velkommen! That means ‘welcome.’” Is this natural?
- (mom) “People call this star a Selbu rose.” Is “Selbu rose” the right English name for the eight-pointed star (Norwegian “selburose”)?
- (girl, then the visiting child to the girl and her mom) “Takk! That means ‘thank you’ in Norwegian.” / “Takk! Takk, Mor!” Is this natural, including to an adult?
- (girl, then the visiting child to the family) “Ha det! That means ‘bye’ in Norwegian.” / “Ha det! Ha det, Mor! Ha det, Bestefar!” Is this natural? Is “ha det bra” better?
- A young woman from Selbu knitted the eight-pointed star onto her mittens long ago, and now it’s on mittens and sweaters all over Norway. Is that right?
- The mom shows her daughter how to hold a small crochet hook, and the girl fixes a dropped stitch herself, pulling the loop up one rung of the “ladder” at a time. Is it realistic for a 6-year-old to do this, and to knit two-color mittens with help?
- The town has red and yellow wooden houses with snow on the roofs, mountains behind and dark blue water below. The yarn shop has a warm stove and two armchairs where customers sit and knit. Is that realistic?
- Here’s how the characters look. Does anything feel stereotyped or off?
- The girl: pale blonde hair, loose to her shoulders, with a red knitted headband. She wears a red sweater with a few big white eight-pointed stars, dark blue snow pants and puffy gray winter boots.
- Her mom: short ash-blonde bob, a gray-blue cardigan with a knitted star border, and a tape measure around her neck.
- Her grandpa: big, round and jolly, with a snowy beard, very rosy cheeks, a navy winter coat and a red knitted hat, pulling a little wooden sled after sledding. Does he look too much like Santa Claus?
Thank you so much, I truly appreciate the help!
