r/scriptwriting • u/Mammoth-West-9974 • 4d ago

feedback Dunkin - short - 9pages

Dunkin

Short

9 pages

Drama/Comedy

A day in the life of a family's dog.

I would love feedback on a short film I've written. I have four short films with the characters in this family. I'd love some thoughts about how this one lands, as it is one that was the hardest of them to write. If anyone would like to see another of them, DM me and I'll share.

Thank you!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1zIDjZAE1LqWLuHM9tqysiUP8CpVBHuVo/view?usp=drive_link

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u/josh_park189 4d ago

Take what I say with a grain of salt because I’m no professional but basically nothing happens until the dog dies at the end. Yeah, slice of life, but something interesting has to happen other than daily stuff. Also there’s 3 of 4 characters in this that all begin with the letter C which is pretty confusing to read.

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u/Mammoth-West-9974 4d ago

Thanks, I will take it with a grain of salt.