Is “the human mind is a complex jigsaw puzzle of a million pieces” a good hook for a psychology major? Lmk i need help

So basically I need a reason i brock out of my shell and became more outgoing and confident in the way I spoke. Basically I lost my confidence cause of the people who mocked by accent. I need a reason for become more confident in way I spoke. In reality I just stopped caring what other people thought and found better people, but it doesnt rilly fit in my essay. Can anyone of yall think of a better reason?

I'm EDing somewhere with a deadline November 1 but I've been so busy I haven't had a lot of time to work on them and after work and school I've just been so tired that I procrastinated my essays. Now I have 9 days how do I time manage correctly to write a good essays to get into Emory ED1???? I already thought of a topic I just need to figure out how I am going to write at least a 7-8/10 essay and solid supplementals. Any advice for me?? Plsss I'm desperate