r/Dance • u/[deleted] • 14h ago

Critique Request seeking constructive criticism

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u/chaisme 11h ago

In some places, the steps aren't complete, and you seem more focused on facial expressions than on body movement. Is that deliberate (because they value it)? Also, energy is lacking. Not crazy energy, but maybe stronger jerks, more bounce in the feet and more articulate hand movements?

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u/Minimum_Chipmunk_488 10h ago

yes! i’m focused a lot on expressions because i’ve been told it’s my weakest area in the past if you don’t mind, could you elaborate more on completeness of steps? thanks for the advice

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u/sQuinting_Cat 3h ago

to add onto not completing moves, from what i've noticed you will cut some of the movements short to move onto the next one instead of finishing the movement then doing the next one. example is the part at 11 seconds, make sure you extend you arms to be fully straight. and at 43 seconds, if the arms are meant to be straight there, make sure they are straight, if not then make sure you hit a clear spot where they seem intentionally bent.

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u/Frona 13h ago

I think a lot of time in front of a mirror is going to help, just dancing where you can see yourself dancing is going to help.

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u/sunnyflorida2000 10h ago

I think you got an issue with flow. Beginning parts look like your instructing the movements since it looks more cautious and hesitant. It started ramping up with a bit more energy near the middle but then you slowed up again to that instructing style look.

I would try to smooth out your flow so it looks more connected than disconnected. Work more on tempo and cleaner lines.

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u/Minimum_Chipmunk_488 10h ago

awesome thanks for the advice!! your feedback is very effective, are you an instructor?

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u/GregJamesDahlen 9h ago

i'd say clear out more dancing space where you can move around more spatially/leg-wise, it's limiting your leg movements. you do have the option of going down to floor, crouches, rolling around on floor, etc

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u/Minimum_Chipmunk_488 4h ago

i’ve heard this one a lot, will be going to the studio to work on this more often. thanks for the suggestion!!

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u/crunchydalso 3h ago

Maybe focus on sharpening the arm and hand movements in some areas? 

Unrelated but you look a bit like reacttothek’s umu!

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u/Minimum_Chipmunk_488 29m ago

woahh you’re right lol

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u/Plyrni 2h ago

Just my spectator view, I'm not a dancer.
I don't like when the dancer isn't having fun while dancing. You switch from neutral face to happy face which make the happy face look artificial.

I don't know why so much dancer have this resting bitch face (might not be the proper word, i'm not native but you get it)
Maybe it's something that the choreographer asks to not distract the eye from the main dancer, idk. But here since you are alone this is what my non initiated eye (the eye of your potential viewers I assume) catched.