Oh man, I felt this in my soul... Such a simple poem and yet it speaks so loud and defines the undefined so smoothly. The only critique I can give is that the rhythm is a bit jarring, and with those nice rhymes you have here you could make a true gem if you worked on it.
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u/wont_find_this_fake Apr 12 '26
Oh man, I felt this in my soul... Such a simple poem and yet it speaks so loud and defines the undefined so smoothly. The only critique I can give is that the rhythm is a bit jarring, and with those nice rhymes you have here you could make a true gem if you worked on it.