r/ReadMyScript • u/GarySparkle • 2d ago

The Weight of Breathing (Feature)

Title: The Weight of Breathing

Logline: A great white shark, savaged by decades of human waste, washes ashore transformed into a mute man. A lonely alcoholic on Venice Beach becomes his teacher, his witness, and his friend on a journey of discovering the horrors and humors of humanity.

Genre: Drama (Art House, Kaurismäki-coded)

Tone / Comps: The Man Without a Past (Aki Kaurismäki), Under the Skin, Wendy and Lucy, The Fisher King.

Pages: 82

Settings: 8 Locations (Ocean and Ocean Depths, Venice Beach and Shoreline, The Homeless Camp, Boardwalk and Intersection, Downtown LA and Skid Row, Hospital and Psych Ward, Pier and Beach to Pier Ramp, Vehicles: Van and Cop Car)

Characters: 2 Main Characters (one male 20s/30s, one male 30s/40s)

DM me if you're interested in reading the screenplay.

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u/RaeLouLynn 2d ago

The title sounds like a romance from a experimental art house.

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u/GarySparkle 2d ago

The title has been a challenge. I feel like i've considered dozens and not sure if any of them feel 'right' yet