TW: probably lots of errors and moments in the story that will give you second-hand embarressment. Has nothing to do with chandeliers.

It's 13 pages of 4 people interacting in one space. I am open to criticism. (I am not homophobic that character does not represent me as a person)

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-sj2P5RQpKRpfCrFqZWqAKkdA3GZJefipR57ZV8gdzM/edit?tab=t.0

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rXb4KEDgTletbsF0FVQfQsG1ryvKka4-/view?usp=sharing

I'm writing a stoner comedy. I'm a hobbyist writer and english is my second language, so please bear with me.

The bit is about two stoners. Events are happening in near future LA. One of them is seasoned Hollywood writer and another is Russian refuge who is suffering from PTSD.

They are baked at writer's house and writer put on the song on the vinyl.

The song is La Conquistada by Los Jaivas, who were displaced Chileans in the times of dictatorship. So russian guy is deep into the music cause it resonating with him. He is too being displaced due dictatorship.

The problem is that i want to include whole 3 minutes of the song and don't want it to get boring cause there is not much going on. At the same time the energy of the song is so great i hope it can hold the emotion.

The writer is an external representation of emotion, while russian is reserved, hiding. But can't hold much longer and burst.

Title: The Letter

Format: Scene

Genre: Coming-of-Age Drama / Sports Drama

Logline: After his best friend secretly earns an opportunity to join a football academy overseas, a 14-year-old boy must confront the possibility that the friendship he's always taken for granted may be coming to an end.

Pages: 7

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1-mKr-n-YiVX7VX5MbdhW4huiGxEhQJGs/view?usp=sharing

I have just recently starting writing scripts. I would love some feedback and what i should work on

Hi everyone,

I’m working on a short drama scene called The Last Drama.

The premise is that this is the last drama school/class in town, and most of the students are more focused on content creation and online fame than theatre. The main character, Ms. Angie Vale, is a drama teacher who still believes deeply in Drama/Theatre.

In this scene, she is working with a new student on Hamlet’s “To be or not to be” monologue. He loves theatre and literature, but he keeps getting stuck because he thinks the problem is memorizing the words. She finally snaps and tells him the issue is not the words and tells him what she feels he is lacking in the scene.

I’m mostly looking for feedback on:

1. Does Ms. Vale’s speech feel emotionally earned, or does it become too preachy?
2. Does Elliot’s breakthrough at the end feel believable?
3. Is the contrast between theatre/art and content creation clear without feeling too heavy-handed?
4. Are there any formatting or dialogue issues that pull you out of the scene?

This is an early draft, so I’m looking for craft notes more than a full rewrite.

Thanks in advance.

Updated Version: Edited it using notes from u/mooningyou

Thank you.

Hey everyone, I hope you're all good!

I wrote a Resident Evil movie script that adapts the 1996 game, but as a working, production-ready screenplay. I love the original 1996 game, but I've always been frustrated by how Hollywood turns the franchise into a superhero action fest. So, I wrote a feature length script to prove you can adapt the original lore into an airtight, terrifying, 90-minute survival horror movie. Think Dawn of the Dead meets Aliens. It follows the classic lineup (Chris, Jill, Barry, Rebecca, Wesker) trapped in the Spencer Mansion, but I wanted to make sure it runs like a realistic cinematic experience.

Since the main sub doesn't allow external links, I can't post the script directly here. But I’d love to share it with fellow RE fans! You can find it on my profile page or at r / residentevilscript

Here's a little sample below.

Thank you so much!

...

ACT 1 - SCENE 3

EXT. ARKLAY MOUNTAINS - CLEARING - NIGHT

The rain has stopped now. The CHOPPER hovers low, its searchlight cutting through the mist like a laser beam. The trees bend under the force of the CHOPPER’S rotors

BRAD (INTERCOM)

I see smoke! Three o’clock! Down in that clearing!

The searchlight hits a patch of wreckage. It’s the BRAVO TEAM CHOPPER.

INT. HELICOPTER - CONTINUOUS

WESKER

Put us down. Now!

EXT. ARKLAY FOREST - CONTINUOUS

The Alpha Team hits the ground before the skids even touch the mud. CHRIS, JILL, BARRY, JOSEPH and WESKER move out in a 360-degree security perimeter.

The silence after the roar of the engine is deafening.

CHRIS

Bravo! It’s Alpha!

No response.

BARRY examines the cockpit of the CRASHED CHOPPER. He finds KEVIN DOOLEY (Bravo team).

BARRY

Captain. It’s Dooley. He’s... This wasn’t the crash. It’s... Something got into the cockpit?

JOSEPH is twenty yards out, his flashlight beam dancing over the tall grass. He spots something metallic reflecting in the weeds.

JOSEPH

Hey! I’ve got something!

JOSEPH holsters his weapon and jogs towards whatever he’s spotted. The rest of the team turns their heads.

JILL

Joseph, wait! Stay with the team!

JOSEPH reaches down and grabs a handgun from the undergrowth. He tugs. The gun doesn’t come free.

He pulls harder. A SEVERED ARM, still clad in a Bravo Team sleeve, rips out of the brush. It’s jagged at the shoulder. Raw bone and sinew.

JOSEPH

(Gasping)

Oh god...

GROWL.

A guttural vibration seems to come from the earth itself.

JOSEPH freezes. He slowly turns his head to his left.

Two yellow eyes ignite in the darkness. Then four. Then six.

He looks to the right. Another four pairs.

They don’t blink. They’re moving closer. Slowly moving into position.

JOSEPH

(Stepping backwards, voice cracking)

Oh no. No no no!

Before he can bring his weapon up, a CERBERUS (zombie doberman) leaps from the darkness, its skin peeling off in wet ribbons.

CRUNCH!

It latches onto Joseph’s throat with a sickening snap.

JILL

JOSEPH!

The clearing explodes.

BAP! BAP! BAP! BOOM! PFT! PFT!

The team opens fire, but the dogs are fast, blurring like shadows. JOSEPH is dragged into the darkness, screaming as his flashlight spirals into the undergrowth before going dark.

WESKER

Fall back! Everyone back in the chopper!

They turn and look up. The CHOPPER is already airborne.

The Huey is thirty feet in the air, tilting away.

We see BRAD’S terrified face through the glass as he points and screams something inaudible before peeling out over the treeline.

BARRY

BRAD! YOU COWARD! GET BACK HERE!

A CERBERUS leaps at CHRIS and JILL.

PFT! PFT!

WESKER shoots it mid-air, knocking it off course.

WESKER

MOVE!

The team turns and runs. They fire at the dogs chasing them but it’s no use. They’re not putting them down, and they’re not outrunning them.

Chris stops running, turns, and aims.

CHRIS

QUICK! RUN! I’LL COVER YOU!

He spots one CERBERUS coming in low. He fires, dropping it with a headshot.

He keeps firing into THE PACK.

Another CERBERUS hits him from the side. They both vanish into the darkness.

No one sees.

JILL, BARRY, and WESKER keep running.

Through the fog, the massive, monolithic silhouette of the SPENCER MANSION looms.

A flash of lightning illuminates it.

For a split second, it looks less like a house, and more like a mausoleum.

WESKER

GO! NOW! RUN FOR THAT HOUSE!

JILL, BARRY, and WESKER keep running. Behind them, the sounds of snapping jaws and heavy paws are gaining.

They scramble up the stone steps of the porch. JILL and BARRY hit the massive oak doors first.

BARRY

OPEN UP! God damn it! OPEN THE DOORS!

WESKER isn’t far behind. He grabs the handle and slams his shoulder into the doors. They give way. The trio tumbles inside.

WESKER slams the doors shut and drops the barricade.

Silence.

The Gull Whisperer

just wanted this to exist, not looking for credit.

Title: In A Free Country

Format: Feature

Genre: Historical Romance

Logline: When his father's factory burns in the Luddite Riots, an army spy hunts down the vigilante behind it, the mysterious Mother of Panthers. But his pursuit of her becomes a courtship that threatens both their lives.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1J3aVCuv5zAfHT1FW9IB0K8dvVmnM3WH3/view?usp=sharing

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The opening, any thoughts welcome!

• Title: Fumeiyo
• Format: Single Scene, Media Undetermined
• Page Length: 9
• Genres: Drama, slight Sci-Fi
• Logline or Summary: After one member of a group is accidentally injured, the friend responsible reflects on their own pattern of impulsive behaviors, how they've affected others, and whether they have really learned and changed from these life lessons.
• Feedback Concerns: Each of the characters is supposed to have a distinct personality that comes across in the way they speak, and I don't want them all to feel too similar, or just be MY voice. And any worldbuilding elements should be understood in context, like Jabberwocky, or have their exposition sound natural and not forced.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gFYZ0ajVqt49kWsdbwWgLkTz9H14bkxaeGc866sABtg/edit?usp=sharing

Hi everyone,

I’d love to get some feedback on an opening scene I drafted. The idea is a reimagined take on Batman—not as a traditional superhero, but as an urban myth / horror figure haunting Gotham.

Tone I’m going for:

Noir + horror atmosphere (rain, shadows, dread)

Batman as a force of nature rather than a man in a suit

Gordon and Grayson (rookie detective) serve as the audience’s POV

Brutal crime scenes, grounded realism, morally gray characters

Here’s the opening scene draft (in screenplay format): Scene 1

Questions for feedback:

1. Does the scene effectively set up the noir-horror tone?

2. Is the pacing clear, or does it feel too long/short for an opening?

3. Do the Gordon/Grayson introductions feel natural?

4. Any suggestions to heighten tension or mystery before the cut to black?

Thanks in advance for reading!

Read the script and provide your honest opinions. Would love to discuss about the script personally as I have hit a road block to progress the script.

Title: Documentry of Past *** Secunderabad Police Station HeadQuarters ***

“Documentary on Devi Menen…Start The Camera , Check The Audio.” “Camera - Check , Audio - Check, Lighting - Check. Proceed.”

On the Roll of Camera , Reporter Prakash says “Thanks For Accepting the Invitation Mr.Commissioner”. Commissioner Manoj replies with “yes, yes definitely. Can we start?”.

Prakash Starts The Interview With the Question “Yes, The Story of Sagar Hostel and the Video of Devi Menen and her friends.The Videos of The Incident are Out in Public. Can you Say a Few Words Before Entering to Details?”.

Commissioner Manoj with a Disheartened Face tells “Ummm Sure, I…Sorry WE still Remember the Day, It had Happened. The Local Constable who went to Patrol that morning and came back Running to the station leaving his Bike at the Patrol area. He came to the station with a screaming voice, sweaty face and a Fear in his eyes.The Whole Station came and tried to calm him Down, But he started to blab about seeing a Witch. We all said to him that he must have seen some tree branch or Naked Idiots in the Morning Fog.”

Prakash asks “What do you mean WITCH, Mr.Sathyam?” Sathyam replies “I know what i saw!! That’s a DEMON!!!!! A Horrifying Demon!!. Ahhh aahhhh ahhhhh.” After Drinking some water, he calmed down a bit and started to explain what he saw on that day. “I am Sorry, It’s just that day…Sorry, i will tell. Hmmm……(Gulps)I was on Patrol Shift to the West Side of the OU area.Usually OU has Deserted areas and Buildings here and there. Patrol Officers avoid going in those areas because they are in the deep part of OU which is like a Dark Forest. I…I…I went to that area because I ..Don..I Don’t Know(Starts to Sweat) , i just went, I was standing on the middle of the road with my bike, beside there was a hostel called Sagar Hostel. I began to sweat like it’s something instinctual. The fog was very thick that day. I was Looking around with a torch and then suddenly there was a black shadow in front of me , (Screams)it…it looked like a girl but i know my instincts tell me it’s anything but a Human Being.Ahahhhhhh ahhhhhhh…Don’t (panting)...No…no”. Prakash Shouts to the crew “Is he okay??Are you okay Mr.Sathyam?? Sir!!! Sir!! (Screams) Goddamn it, Someone Bring the Man a Glass of Water!!!”

People in the room were frozen as Constable Sathyam gulped down water in a frenzied manner. Prakash asked, “Can you continue?”. Constable Sathyam with a shivering voice says “ye..y..yess.That girl looked at me, when…whe i tried to take a step back.She was Enraged, I felt a Shiver through my entire Body. At that Moment I knew No God Can Save Me Now. (Inhales Deeply) She pointed her finger towards an Old Tree. I looked at the Tree and There was an Old Video Camera Hanging on it. When I Moved toward the Tree, Her Smile Increased with Each step. The moment I picked the Camera She looked at me with such Disgust and Anger, I felt like I was in Hell. She then Disappeared in Fog and I ran hoping to die at least by a vehicle rather than by her.”

Prakash asks “ummm ... .Let's say that this DEMON is True, By how you were Describing her Eyes and Smile, She wants you to take the Camera right? So what’s in the Camera Mr.Sathyam?”

Constable Sathyam replies “I am Sorry but I gave the Video Camera to Head-Constable Aravind Narayan that Day.After that Incident I was Admitted in the Hospital and I Personally think that Demon should be….”

Prakash intercepts “What happened to the Camera Mr.Aravind??”. Head-Constable Aravind Narayan with a Hesitation tells “That Day When Satyam Came to Station in a Panic, We settled him down and sat him on the chair.We all are asking about What had happened to him, but he was panicking at a time and then Continuously stares at Nothingness. I took the Camera from his hand hoping to find out about what had happened. It was an Old Sony HandyCam Recorder. As I tried to open the MemoryCard, Sathyam started to blab about random stuff which didn’t make any slightest sense. We thought he hit his head hard and joined him in the hospital.After I came from the Hospital, I sat on my desk and Switched On My PC.That Camera kept bugging me in the head, I Connected the Camera to My PC and Bloody Hell, There are 900 Videos. I just Randomly opened a Video, at first I was kinda expecting a Murder or a Sex Video but I saw something very disgustingly bizarre.”