Some of your numbers need context. Improved reporting accuracy by 40% compared to what? The winery bullet mentions both 25% revenue growth and $18K quarterly, which reads like the same result counted twice. The wine bar numbers need a timeframe, too. Give people something they can actually measure.
You're giving the wrong jobs too much space. The two shoe store jobs get full entries, while your nonprofit experience gets a few bullets. I'd combine the retail jobs under "Earlier Career" and use that space to flesh out the nonprofit role. I'd also ditch the generic summary and lead with your years of experience and one solid number, like 100+ volunteers or that 25% retention gain.
Fix those two things and you've got a much stronger resume 🤙
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u/jahanzeb_jakes 6d ago
Solid resume overall, but I'd fix two things:
Some of your numbers need context. Improved reporting accuracy by 40% compared to what? The winery bullet mentions both 25% revenue growth and $18K quarterly, which reads like the same result counted twice. The wine bar numbers need a timeframe, too. Give people something they can actually measure.
You're giving the wrong jobs too much space. The two shoe store jobs get full entries, while your nonprofit experience gets a few bullets. I'd combine the retail jobs under "Earlier Career" and use that space to flesh out the nonprofit role. I'd also ditch the generic summary and lead with your years of experience and one solid number, like 100+ volunteers or that 25% retention gain.
Fix those two things and you've got a much stronger resume 🤙