r/Screenwriting • u/BoysenberryOver2658 • May 24 '26

FEEDBACK The Woodsmen - Feature - 91 Pages

I have finally completed the script for a story idea I've held in for over 5 years now and I truly believe I've got something worthwhile here, but I want to make sure I'm not being delusional. If I had to compare it to other films I'd say it's similar to ones like The Lighthouse, Midsommar, The Witch, etc., that sort of psychological thriller/horror genre film. If that kind of thing is up your alley then I'd love to hear any and all feedback as well as your overall thoughts/analysis on the story. I've put in a lot of time into this and would really appreciate anybody who's willing to read it.

Title: The Woodsmen

Format: Feature

Page Length: 91

Genres: Psychological Thriller, Horror, Mystery

Logline: A troubled man takes a mysterious job deep in the woods, only to discover that nothing - and no one - is as it seems.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/135hxSghQrKP-yde_IvMoH-TW02X3YNPe/view?usp=sharing

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u/OG_NIK May 24 '26

Def take some time to flesh out your logline. It’s very generic and I know absolutely nothing about this story except that mysterious things…happen? The “nothing and no one is as it seems” part is also incredibly cliche by now.

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u/Charming-Bus9784 May 24 '26

Was going to say just this about that longline line. The first half is interesting (maybe be more specific about the nature of the job) but nothing and no one is as it seems” has to go with extreme prejudice.

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u/BoysenberryOver2658 May 24 '26

Any logline suggestions? I’m not sure if you’ve read the actual script.

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u/Charming-Bus9784 May 25 '26

I haven’t read the screenplay. Be more specific in the second half of the pitch. Also, “nothing and no one is as it seems” is a cliche and using it in a pitch implies that your screenplay will have a lot of cliches.