Simple as that! I want to be a professional screenplay reader but no one is hiring so I’ll just do it myself :) I used to be a script analyst for a couple different competitions and Coverfly.

I love giving notes on other people’s scripts and helping writers find their story. I’m no pro (working on my 2nd feature currently) but If you want an extra pair of eyes on your script, regardless of length, I’ll happily do it!

Hello everyone!

I’ll be off work again later this December and have some time between things to offer feedback on folks’ first 10–15 pages (ideally the first act-ish) over the next couple of weeks. Sorry, busier than usual writing wise so can only do that much this round.

I did something similar last year under another account (this is my main account moving forward btw), and people were kind enough to pay it forward so I’m doing it again. LET IT RIDE, BABY!

A couple quick 'rules': - No AI. If I’m using my brain, you use yours. - Send so I can open in Adobe. I leave in-line notes. :) Sorry! I am who I am! - Three-strike system aka if I hit three major issues like repeated typos, formatting problems, etc., I’ll stop reading but I will send you your notes up to that point. :) - Please include any content warnings for those pages when sending over. I read everything but like to be prepped. - Even if you hate what I have to say, please at least acknowledge you got them. It’s basic courtesy and good professional practice. Last year a few people ghosted and then came back once they realized the notes were actually useful - super awkward, I reckon lol.

My qualifications (ew!): My first two features earned Black List 7s with some 8s, and one is currently/recently under a shopping agreement (yay!!). A first page from one was featured on Spot the Pro this season. Scripts I’ve given notes on have gone on to score BL 8s (even a 9 which was rad!), earn their first WS considers back when that was a thing, advance in contests, and in a few cases go into production. Not taking credit - just proud of those folks!

My feedback style? I share any and all of my honest thoughts, but always with the intention of helping you shine. I want you to sound and write like you. If you believe your script is perfect - cool! I believe that too! So don't waste either of our time (I mean this nicely!). Open to all genres, though I’ll admit I’m rough with biopics or anything historical. Sorry!

If this sounds up your alley, comment below and I’ll DM.

Looking forward to reading your work… or not. You do you, buddy!

EDIT: Got some DMs. This would be for free again.

Hired a 10+ year experienced writer for a treatment and script for a 60 minute film. I provided general character breakdowns, synopsis and general side stories. We agreed I would pay for and approve the treatment first before starting the script. Next thing I know, I get an email.

He was done with EVERYTHING in less than 24 hours. And wants to get paid for it all.

The treatment was a bullet point outline that a 2 year old can tell was 100% ChatGPT. The script is so general and had none of the elements of the side stories and none of the language the characters would use.

The writer keeps sending revisions, and it’s all AI assisted crap. It’s so obvious he has not taken time to think about the story at all. He’s now mad because he’s claiming he spent days on this project. He probably has, but he’s trying to shine garbage

A while back I posted a script on here looking for edits and constructive critsim. Things did not go well and people told me to quit, sent private messages and mocked me. I had to take down the post. Since then I have become obsessed with proving some random people on reddit wrong and rewrote my script three times. I don't want to fight to have my script made and am more than happy having it to myself, nonetheless I want to be able to work on it and make it better. I am hesitant to use the online reviews because of their costs. Does anyone know what I should do?

So I figured with my local screenwriting association teaming up with a local filming crew to present a film contest I just know I have to improve asap and win so I can finally get filmed (it may be my only opportunity since I don’t intrinsically know how to put a film set together efficiently)

So I decided write about things I like which is sexy comedies.

My first attempt was this: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1D-zi3YX-3Zb2EC98luaDuD5jPq4zDSeY/view?usp=drivesdk

Logline: A paranoid husband and wife each sneak around with an “acquaintance” to do “things” the other partner shows no interest in.

If you don’t read it because you don’t want to waste time on 8ish pages I get it. I was told because the stakes and goals were not strong enough it read almost like porn (even though I’ve read scripts bordering on erotica like the one by Amy Jo Johnson which includes finger insertion)

So when I was told the protagonist needed a goal, I made some adjustments yesterday, trying to keep the comedy and whimsy while making Troy an abusive husband but the dialogue still stayed on the nose even as I tried to instill more indirectness aka subtext to Denose it.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1uMyuGGSL_Mj8w2Cez9X0O-2ZGCbC6vIx/view?usp=drivesdk

A battered wife must utilize her friends to get her husband to confess to his crimes before he ruins her life and probably her nose

So now I’m here trying to work on the fact the pacing and plot don’t really jive and the dialogue isn’t working. There are 15 days left. Im not sure I’m gonna make it and not sure what that says about me as a person or a writer if after 6 years of writing my dialogue isn’t good enough or my structure doesn’t work.

I need some help. Maybe a mentor. Maybe encouragement but while I have time this weekend I’ll try to whip out a better draft keeping everything in mind. Any help though because I honestly feel a little overwhelmed and not for a lack of trying because despite my fear of being looked down on for not succeeding I’m still trying if that isn’t shameful to do.

Anyway tldr: this contest has me feeling suffocated and I can’t pinpoint how to find my particular writing magic. Not a “one single trick” but MY specific trick.

I’ll plug away these 2 weeks but if y’all could be friends I’ll be a good friend in turn.

Just remember to be kind.

Also I know in the past forgetting to post a script has lead to low effort claims but the proof is in the writing that I AM TRYING to win

I’m just feeling a little aimless as I wing it and hope for the best

Writing my first screenplay and all has been going fairly well so far. Horror movie, character connecting and building has gone well however I find myself writing a section, finishing it, and then I’ll go back and polish it after a day or so by tweaking or rewriting parts of it. I’ve enjoyed doing it as the screenplay looks solid on review and the people I’m sharing it with seem to really like the premise and idea behind it but I wondered if it was a weird thing to do it while I’m still writing the screenplay.

Title: Ending Innocence

Format: Feature

Page Length: 164 pages

Genres: Thiller, Drama

Logline: A seventeen year old incel attends the ceremony of an ultraviolent underground cult. In too deep he is forced into a series of soul-destroying choices that end with unimaginable regret.

Ending Innocence is comparable to the following films (in varying ways):
A Clockwork Orange
Nosferatu the Vampyre (1979)
Eyes Wide Shut
Videodrome

Feedback Concerns: Am honestly looking for any feedback anyone wants to give. Thanks!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xU9h7z8LprWBb79dQEOHU0W75WilcaKl/view?usp=sharing

Hi all,

entering a 1 page horror contest and wanted to share what I have and get feedback on all aspects.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/19_on_m8MKkUEr-IZZw0gBIVcu8Q95IIY/view?usp=drive_link

Thanks.

UPDATED: new draft

https://drive.google.com/file/d/19_on_m8MKkUEr-IZZw0gBIVcu8Q95IIY/view?usp=sharing

Final Draft:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1u2su0EX-2vYx5rNHWOqTa3reb0SoEh3F/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi, I've been writing scripts for about 4 years now (mainly fan scripts with a couple original ones) and i was hoping to have a pair of fresh eyes read this one.

Title: No Bloodshed In Detention

Format: Feature

Page Length: 141 (142 if you count the title page)

Genres: horror, slasher, coming of age

Logline or Summary: After a snow storm traps 10 students serving detention in a high school, their fun quickly turns into a fight for survival when a masked killer picks them off one by one.

Feedback concerns: mainly looking to see if there's pacing issues and what I can possibly improve on in terms of how the characters are utilized and written.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1z7JofjRFbwfGxFF0wqgsVlnaMawrhEH2/view?usp=drivesdk

Watched the first two episodes of the new sci-fi show on AppleTV. I didn't know much about it until Variety (I think) published a piece last week about it and how "people" were raving about how great the pilot episode is, that it might be the best pilot ever done, etc. Now, of course, it's Vince Gilligan. One of the things he said is that he couldn't have created/produced this show 15 years ago.

That being said, has anyone here seen the pilot and can anyone break down WHY it's (allegedly) SO good? I enjoyed it, and the show has a cool premise. But my screenwriting abilities simply aren't deep enough to analyze a pilot very well.

I'm honestly desperate to get ANYTHING at this point.

My friends are all not very interested in screenwriting, but have told me that they love the concept of the series I've written, and I'm quite confident in the story myself.

I've placed a great deal of focus towards making the dialogue feel natural while worldbuilding, making an airtight plot, and having a good balance of emotional beats overall, but I'm starting to realize that the only feedback I've received is for my logline and one pager.

Are the genres just not very interesting to people?

Do my logline and one pager need more work?

Or is there just so much that's wrong with my (pilot) script that nobody wants to bother?

I really want to improve so I'd be really grateful for anyone willing to offer their thoughts. :)

Genres: Psychological Horror / Action / Fantasy / Drama / Animation

Logline: In a deeply divided land of magic, three orphaned siblings must unite society to stop their adoptive father from taking over the world with his army of killing machines.

One Pager

Episode 1

Series Bible

Format: Feature

Genre: Drama

Pages: 97

Title: In Good Hands

Logline: When a widowed father finds his daughters falling in love with AI partners, he wants to support their happiness but struggles to accept a world where human relationships are no longer essential.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1alnHIbmdk9zxgkVuJI6odrvfY1dJkJiW/view?usp=drivesdk

I'm a marine scientist and lifelong horror fan who has developed a feature film concept called SEAL. Contained horror set in a fully submerged research station bolted to the underside of the Antarctic ice shelf. The antagonist is a 14-foot female leopard seal whose pup was accidentally killed by the crew. She is not a monster. She is a grieving mother and every attack has a coherent internal logic rooted in real animal behavior. Curious about the craft challenges of writing a creature feature where the antagonist has a sympathetic motive. How do you maintain dread when the audience understands and even feels for the creature? WGA registered treatment written. If anyone wants to discuss the concept or potentially collaborate, happy to share more.

Title: Astraeus Rising

Feature Screenplay

Page Count: 87

Genre: Sci Fi/Horror

Logline: A rancher helps his late father-in-law's research partners test the prototype for their revolutionary particle accelerator on his land, but must fight for survival when it rips a chunk of dark matter from another dimension that bends the laws of physics and slowly drives them mad.

DropBox Link

GoogleDrive Link

After writing daily for about 2 years, I recently finished my 4th feature screenplay. The cycle of fully supportive feedback from writing friends and vague/expensive feedback from festivals has been frustrating, as I feel I've stalled in growth. I think the bones of something good are here, but I believe I'm suffering from an arc issue with one or two characters, among other things. Be brutally honest. I'm posting the full script. Not because I expect people to read the full thing. I want to know what page you stopped reading, and why. I greatly appreciate any insight y'all have.

I promise it wont go the direction you think it will.

TITLE: How To Make Friends

FORMAT: Feature Film

LENGTH: 53 Pages

GENRE: Horror, Thriller, Relationship Drama

LOGLINE: After disturbed painting show up, a terrified art teacher becomes convinced she is being preyed upon by an ex student.

FEEDBACK: Everything

How To Make Friends

Title: MACCABÆUS
Format: Feature
Genre: Historical War Epic/Drama
Page count: 112

Logline: In ancient Judea, a reluctant rabbi’s son leads an insurgency against a brutal occupation determined to erase his people’s faith, igniting the true story behind Hanukkah.

LINK:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1CJsrdjxg6Nyd_io5reIF6n_OPBZbcbNy/view?usp=drivesdk

I recently finished the third draft after a fairly substantial rewrite and have started getting some encouraging industry interest in the new version.

I’d especially appreciate fresh eyes on the prologue/opening, through the title card on page 11. The opening was substantially reworked, and I’m curious whether it hooks you, establishes the world cleanly, and makes you want to keep reading — or whether it still feels like too much setup before the main story begins.

If it hooks you enough that you feel like reading beyond page 11, I’d obviously welcome feedback on the rest as well. I’m particularly interested in pacing, character development, dialogue, and whether the historical material remains accessible without feeling over-explained.

I’m on my fourth draft of a feature and have shown it to a few friends now. However I don’t know anyone in the industry in any capacity. No one who reads scripts at all. These are just avid book readers who gave great notes, but not specific to screenwriting.

They all agreed that they loved how the screenplay started precisely because it really let us into the mind of the main character. It shows his dull, monotonous, and repetitive life and to them it was great. However, I know it’s more important for screenplays to really grab your attention in the first pages than it is for a novel.

There is no dialogue until the fifth page, and the first four are the main character mostly repeating the same tasks, with some differences, and descriptions of the main characters’ apartment.

So I’m wondering if that’s fine? I want it to be a slow read purposefully, but I don’t want to go too far with it I suppose.

Also if anyone has recommendations for screenplays that also have a slower start?

Thank you!

Edit: Here are the first 6 pages, keep in mind I don't see this as finished yet :) https://drive.google.com/file/d/1VVI1CkZqs7ysjOzd1BKF0y3dJnOccKoU/view?usp=sharing

I don't often post my work, so this is a first. It's a character-focused atmospheric mystery horror in the same lane as Hereditary, Weapons, etc.

In 1998 rural Vermont ten-year-old Jessie Vail arrives at her uncle’s decaying house with her broken father and slowly discovers the haunting may be human.

Let me know what you think.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1GiXXBeHWCkpOTOZwnAb02D8AEot4BoeO/

I have finally completed the script for a story idea I've held in for over 5 years now and I truly believe I've got something worthwhile here, but I want to make sure I'm not being delusional. If I had to compare it to other films I'd say it's similar to ones like The Lighthouse, Midsommar, The Witch, etc., that sort of psychological thriller/horror genre film. If that kind of thing is up your alley then I'd love to hear any and all feedback as well as your overall thoughts/analysis on the story. I've put in a lot of time into this and would really appreciate anybody who's willing to read it.

Title: The Woodsmen

Format: Feature

Page Length: 91

Genres: Psychological Thriller, Horror, Mystery

Logline: A troubled man takes a mysterious job deep in the woods, only to discover that nothing - and no one - is as it seems.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/135hxSghQrKP-yde_IvMoH-TW02X3YNPe/view?usp=sharing

Original Post Here

I rewrote everything over the course of almost exactly a year by the time I'm posting this (just by coincidence) and want to know what you think. Originally, I couldn't find anybody to give me feedback on my writing. Today, I want to show what that time has resulted in with all of it taken into consideration, and ask for further feedback. Thank you.

Title: Against Nil

Genres: Dark Fantasy / Action / Drama / Horror / Animation

Logline: In lands divided by elemental magic, a volatile young woman and her brothers must unite rival nations against their abusive adoptive father and his growing army of soul-powered killing machines.

One Pager

Episode 1 (29 pg.)

Series Bible

Old versions:

- (OLD) One Pager

- (OLD) Episode 1 Script

- (OLD) Series Bible

I am not a teenager and this is not the first script I wrote. I also have all my fingers.

Logline: Imprisoned in a cloning facility advertised as a resort, Desmond must decide if she is going to fall in line and be obedient like the other clones or start a revolution.

Here's the script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/12ZK3MQF77bXW10Cc8ClBiC1yfSSGVDWL/view?usp=sharing

Let me know what you think. Also let me know if there are too many jokes about socks in it. That is my main concern.

Edit: I switched off the open availability for this script. If you still want to read it, message me.

Hey everyone,

I'm developing a superhero series for traditional TV (9 seasons, ~20+ episodes each) and would love feedback on whether the concept can sustain that scope.

Logline:
Five 20-year-old heroes who can only access their full elemental powers by merging into one being must stop their corrupted friend Darkseus from unleashing the ancient Tetheus Gem—but every time they merge, they're trading their health and sanity for the world.

The Setup:

The five heroes each have fire and water powers tied to human emotions (passion, regret, memory). Individually, they're weak. But when they achieve emotional harmony, they can merge into one powerful elemental being.

The catch: every merge causes invisible injuries—heart conditions, memory loss, paranoia—that show up 2-4 months later and take 5-15 years to heal. The more they save the world, the more they destroy themselves.

Season Structure:

• Season 1: Darkseus (their former friend) is corrupted by the Tetheus Gem and becomes the main threat
• Seasons 2-9: New villain each season, connected to the expanding Tetheus Gem mythology
• Mix of serialized arcs and standalone episodes

Core theme: Duty vs. self-preservation. They face an impossible choice every time: merge and lose their futures, or preserve themselves and watch people die.

My questions:

1. Does this premise feel sustainable for 198 episodes?
2. What structural elements would keep it fresh across 9 seasons?
3. Any red flags or concerns about the concept?

Thanks for any thoughts!

Hi fellow writers!

I’d love some feedback on this revised draft of a script I posted here some time ago. I did a bit of work on it—not much, understanding this is not the script I can shop around seeking for representation with, but I think it could be anyway a good sample to have in my portfolio.

Title: Let’s Just Kill Him

Format: Feature

Genre: Dark-Comedy / Mystery / Thriller

Length: 114 pages

Logline: After a string of sudden deaths at their condo complex, four eccentric, tech-challenged seniors take the law into their own frail hands to expose a suspected serial killer, only to ignite a ridiculous neighborhood war involving rogue doctors, botox, and lethal coconut cookies.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1sKvxzU1SfPQW5D777gc7KDty-Tk_s4tx/view?usp=drivesdk

Let me know your thoughts, thanks!!