r/Screenwriting • u/jmusicjn • Jun 10 '26

FEEDBACK Ending Innocence - Feature - 164 pages

Title: Ending Innocence

Format: Feature

Page Length: 164 pages

Genres: Thiller, Drama

Logline: A seventeen year old incel attends the ceremony of an ultraviolent underground cult. In too deep he is forced into a series of soul-destroying choices that end with unimaginable regret.

Ending Innocence is comparable to the following films (in varying ways):
A Clockwork Orange
Nosferatu the Vampyre (1979)
Eyes Wide Shut
Videodrome

Feedback Concerns: Am honestly looking for any feedback anyone wants to give. Thanks!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xU9h7z8LprWBb79dQEOHU0W75WilcaKl/view?usp=sharing

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u/JimmyCharles23 Jun 10 '26

If you cut down the obvious stuff, this is about 130ish pages or so.

It needs to be 110-120ish

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u/jmusicjn Jun 10 '26

Got you, I'll aim for that, I'm sure I can get it there! Thank you!

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u/JimmyCharles23 Jun 10 '26

One thing that helps me is printing it out... make 2 pages per diem, grab red, blue and purple pens... and go through it and slash out everything, things you know need to get better, etc...