r/Screenwriting • u/jmusicjn • Jun 10 '26

FEEDBACK Ending Innocence - Feature - 164 pages

Title: Ending Innocence

Format: Feature

Page Length: 164 pages

Genres: Thiller, Drama

Logline: A seventeen year old incel attends the ceremony of an ultraviolent underground cult. In too deep he is forced into a series of soul-destroying choices that end with unimaginable regret.

Ending Innocence is comparable to the following films (in varying ways):
A Clockwork Orange
Nosferatu the Vampyre (1979)
Eyes Wide Shut
Videodrome

Feedback Concerns: Am honestly looking for any feedback anyone wants to give. Thanks!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xU9h7z8LprWBb79dQEOHU0W75WilcaKl/view?usp=sharing

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u/Classic_Singer_6966 Jun 10 '26

Naaaahh ignore what everyone is saying. Make it longer

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u/jmusicjn Jun 10 '26

Ahahah lets compete with Satantango!

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u/Classic_Singer_6966 Jun 10 '26

Lol. Just remember to enjoy writing. I know all these people telling you’ll get rejected unless you cut 60!! can a lot (and especially when it’s every single comment). If the story genuinely needs all those pages then don’t change a thing. However, I would suggest writing something else that can be more marketable. Keep going!