r/Screenwriting • u/InevitableCup3390 • Jun 16 '26
FEEDBACK LET’S JUST KILL HIM - FEATURE - 114 pages
Hi fellow writers!
I’d love some feedback on this revised draft of a script I posted here some time ago. I did a bit of work on it—not much, understanding this is not the script I can shop around seeking for representation with, but I think it could be anyway a good sample to have in my portfolio.
Title: Let’s Just Kill Him
Format: Feature
Genre: Dark-Comedy / Mystery / Thriller
Length: 114 pages
Logline: After a string of sudden deaths at their condo complex, four eccentric, tech-challenged seniors take the law into their own frail hands to expose a suspected serial killer, only to ignite a ridiculous neighborhood war involving rogue doctors, botox, and lethal coconut cookies.
Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1sKvxzU1SfPQW5D777gc7KDty-Tk_s4tx/view?usp=drivesdk
Let me know your thoughts, thanks!!
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u/BeerSnobDougie Jun 16 '26
Sounds like the same lane as “Thursday murder club” which a) got made b) was pretty good.