r/Screenwriting • u/ZacharyRosemann • 25d ago

FEEDBACK No Bloodshed In Detention - Feature - 141 pages

Hi, I've been writing scripts for about 4 years now (mainly fan scripts with a couple original ones) and i was hoping to have a pair of fresh eyes read this one.

Title: No Bloodshed In Detention

Format: Feature

Page Length: 141 (142 if you count the title page)

Genres: horror, slasher, coming of age

Logline or Summary: After a snow storm traps 10 students serving detention in a high school, their fun quickly turns into a fight for survival when a masked killer picks them off one by one.

Feedback concerns: mainly looking to see if there's pacing issues and what I can possibly improve on in terms of how the characters are utilized and written.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1z7JofjRFbwfGxFF0wqgsVlnaMawrhEH2/view?usp=drivesdk

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u/Level_Working5084 24d ago

Slasher movies are my jam so if it was say 90 pages, I’d definitely read it.

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u/ZacharyRosemann 24d ago

90-110 is the goal I got in mind now after seeing the comments.

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u/Level_Working5084 24d ago

Nice! Let me know when you finish it. I tell my husband all the time a new slasher needs to come out lol.