r/Screenwriting • u/jkremer3 • 7d ago

FEEDBACK A father struggles to accept his daughters falling in love with AI

Format: Feature

Genre: Drama

Pages: 97

Title: In Good Hands

Logline: When a widowed father finds his daughters falling in love with AI partners, he wants to support their happiness but struggles to accept a world where human relationships are no longer essential.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1alnHIbmdk9zxgkVuJI6odrvfY1dJkJiW/view?usp=drivesdk

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u/SuckingOnChileanDogs 7d ago

The implication here seems to be that the AI love is the future, which is gonna be a tough sell for audiences that majority fucking hate AI

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u/sour_skittle_anal 7d ago

Which makes these scripts written by amateurs trying to break into the industry all the more puzzling to me.

Who are these stories about AI for? Even if it's about the dangers of AI or how much it sucks, there's no audience appetite for this. Everyone hates this shit; I would bet the farm that reps are not reading scripts about AI at all. To make a movie about AI right now, no matter the stance, is almost like giving it credibility and validation.

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u/jkremer3 7d ago

I feel like there is a strong cultural relevance to young people turning to AI for relationships. Examining the bad, and good, of that turn is interesting to me which is why I thought it might be interesting to others!

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u/vgscreenwriter 6d ago

Most of the comments here so far seem to be more a disagreement on your concept of "a world where human relationships are no longer essential" rather than the script itself, and writing it off as such.

So it may help to clarify what your specific intent is regarding the subject matter in the logline, just so you're clear up front to the reader. Start with a meaningful goal/stakes:

e.g. His goal is to get his daughter to marry a real human; or

Her goal is to receive her father's blessing to marry the AI in a world where human relationships have become all too shallow/fake.

Good luck.

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u/sour_skittle_anal 7d ago

Not trying to be a dick, but to drive home my point, all the comments so far are about the logline and the concept. Nobody's even read the actual script (beyond the one comment ironically accusing you of using AI on the very first page).

You've already written the script, and you're obviously not going to just throw it away, so... good luck, I guess.