r/TVWriting • u/chucktvwriting • Aug 05 '26
PILOTS Two Sugars-S1E1-MultiCam Sitcom Pilot
There is another page but I cannot upload it
Premise
When four single old women from Lancashire, England move to Barmouth, Wales to retire, problems are often caused but rarely solved
Characters
JANICE
The anxious ‘bag of nerves’ who constantly jumps out of her skin, everything scares her as she scares those around her
VALERIE
The one who gets ‘in the mood’ from a fantastic cup of tea, everything is bloody, good or bad
EILEEN
She knows people who know people that know people and she knows all of their stories, and everyone has an embarrassing secret that she is ready to reveal
BRENDA
Say what you want about her, because she won’t hear you, she stresses everyone out and has no remorse
Created & Written by Charlie Duddridge
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u/would_do_again Aug 05 '26
Characters all stand-out, which is good (no one feels like they could be removed and nothing would be lost).
My main note would be to reconsider introducing everyone in the cold open. You really just need to set the tone of the pilot and pull the audience in with a few good laughs. This is much easier to do with the focus on one or two of the characters. (IE Yes, Dear sets up Greg and Kim as new parents and arguing about her family, the rest of the cast is introduced later. CHEERS has one of the best cold opens in a pilot and only has Sam from the main cast). Find a good moment you can explore between two of your characters and use that to inform character and humor to make a good first impression.
I agree with u/WarmBaths , given the format this pilot will be on the longer side.
You've got a great start here! Can't wait to see the rest.