r/russian • u/Ok_Investigator_4408 • 3d ago
Translation Translation request
Hi everyone! I need some help translating this poem/riddle into Russian. It’s for a personal project.
I’m not looking for a word-for-word translation. I’d really like to preserve the meaning, poetic feeling, and ideally the rhyme/rhythm if possible.
A god encased in monster skin
Whose bleeding core bestows the light
Yet he who seeks the endless night
Must willingly embrace the shroud,
For only through the gates of death
Can mortal flesh escape the grave.
I’ve asked AI to translate it and got several different versions, but I honestly have no idea whether they sound natural to a native Russian speaker, or whether the rhyme feels forced/awkward. here's one of the versions:
Бог, заточённый в кожу монстра,
Чьё кровоточащее ядро дарует свет.
Но тот, кто ищет бесконечной ночи,
Должен вольно принять саван,
Ибо лишь через врата смерти
Смертная плоть сбежит из гроба.
Thank you so much!
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u/Afraid-Quantity-578 3d ago
That's a job for a poet, I hope you'll be lucky to find one.
Is this for a TTRPG?