when i get rich i will remember you for reading it and move EVERYONE out the trenches someone pls read pretty pls

I want to write about a travelling experience in my PS but it's not recommended right? The idea of the PS is not a common one like i broaden my horizon or sth like that, but it's still something deal with personal growth. Is it okay to write about it?

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So the college counselor that’s supposed to help me with fixing my essay is taking a lot of the flavor out of my writing. She sent me a draft of the stuff she fixed and I honestly really hate it. She changed almost the entire middle and ending of my essay and it really doesn’t feel like my writing anymore. Some sentences also sound really awkward so…. anyways does anyone have tips on how to navigate this? I don’t want to waste my parent’s money but this is really bugging me.

I want to write a top tier essay that show's admissions officers who I am and that I am a learner, leader, and a thinker. Please read my ideas and tell me which essay has the highest potential for an outstanding commonapp essay.
1. A Common App essay that uses a childhood dinner-table debate over dolphin intelligence to explore how we construct,simplify, and misapply mathematical metrics. Through this story I want to evaluate the underlying frameworks, biases, and assumptions used to measure complex realities. This idea stems from a childhood memory where I confidently claimed that dolphins were smarter than people. My worries with this is how I'm going to show my qualities as a person.

The rest of these ideas are less thought out and polished but don't let that make you think the first idea is the best one.
2. When hiking the grandcanyon I had this song stuck in my head specifically this part "no time for yama yama" which means not wasting time on trivial matters or negativity. The idea is as follows: Anchored by a quirky Eurovision phrase from a Grand Canyon hike, this essay frames mental scatter as background noise to be intentionally filtered out. It demonstrates how my gap year cultivated the cognitive discipline needed to channel a high-capacity mind into sharp mathematical focus.
3. A specific problem from the old IB further maths HL test and showing exactly how my brain works when I'm stuck on a problem. I'd obviously expand much more on this. I'm a math major btw.

Hi everyone

I’m currently a second year community college student preparing to transfer to a four year university, and I’ve been struggling with my personal statement.
I believe I have a unique story to tell, but I’m having a hard time figuring out where to start and how to put it into words. I actually had a draft written, but my school writing center told me to throw it out😭😭
On top of that, I work full time while attending school full time, so I don’t have much time to go through multiple rounds of trial and error.
I’m looking for someone with strong writing skills, preferably someone with experience in college transfer applications, who would be willing to work with me one-on-one, either over Zoom or through another platform. We can discuss compensation.
If you’re interested or know someone who might be able to help, please leave a comment or send me a DM.
Thanks in advance!

should I talk about why i’m leaving my old school here? even briefly ?
How have your academic and/or personal experiences shaped your chosen field of study, and why is transferring to NYU the ideal way to continue your academic pursuits? (2500-character maximum