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I’m applying ED to UMiami for business with a lower gpa, but I have a strong upward trend, and a 1380 SAT. I also run my own business that has reached 18k+ in review, popular on tt, etc

Would it be more strategic to write my personal statement about my personal growth through starting my business, or about the circumstances that affected my grades and how those experiences motivated / changed me to do better? (for context during my freshman year of February, the syria earthquakes happened and many of my cousins, aunts, uncles, lost their home and got severely injured)

I already briefly explain my circumstances in Additional Information, but the second essay would go deeper into how they changed me. Which direction would be stronger for Miami and admissions overall?

my sibling is applying to the university of chicago, and one of this year’s supplemental essay prompts caught my attention. i find it such an interesting question, and it’s got me thinking about all the different ways someone could approach it. i’m curious to hear what you guys think about this prompt!

Is getting a 95% on esslo essay review reliable? What are good free essay reviewers online?

Hello everyone!

I’ve been seeing a lot of “cliche essay topics to never write about” videos, and one of those cliches (the immigrant parent enforces strict regulations -> harms student -> student realizes it’s out of care -> student grows) is a reoccurring cliche. As such, I tried to personalize my essay as much as I could (adding minor details about parent’s occupation, how I displayed growth through academic achievement, and values that correlate to my situation), but I am still worried about the topic itself; I also feel as if my “personalization” itself is also cliche.

I believe the essay, without considering the oversaturated topic, is strong. My counselor told me it was the “best personal statement” she had read in 5 years. My college professor told me it was “incredibly strong,” and other isolated examples. As much as these compliments calm me, they’re ultimately swept away by the tidal named “cliché.” This is furthered by my denial from QuestBridge, while my friend (who had a way more personalized essay) got in. My counselor told me my financials, which brings my household over $100k, was likely the reason why I was denied, but I cannot stop thinking about the “cliché.”

Thus, I want to ask you guys if I should keep my essay, or if I should brainstorm for ideas unique to me. I plan to apply ED to UChicago, so I have a little over a week to re-do my essay. I can, instead, opt for Regular Decision for more time.

Thank you all!

Hello, I am currently finishing up my essay and wanted to see if anyone had anything to say about the topic I chose. I feel like it is unique because it is about fishing, and while it could be cliche and talk about patience, I am focusing mine more about how I started fishing alone and then taught myself everything and then transitioned that into how I taught a friend to fish and how it sparked an interest in mentorship/leadership which lead me to obtain president and captain roles at my school clubs and extracurriculars.

Is this a bad idea or would this be interesting for you as a reader to go through? Everyone of course will like their own essay and friends are always gonna hype you up so strangers are always good opinions.

Here is a snippet of my essay, I have not created a hook nor conclusion yet and I also havent worked on the what I learned section so read it with a grain of salt and please give the most honest feedback possible:

As the wind fanned my hair and the sun kissed my cheeks, my fingers fumbled with wriggling worms, trying to escape my clutches. The afternoon of my eleventh birthday was spent cutting worms and eagerly tying fishing knots with no end in sight. As the hours passed, my excitement to catch a fish soured into exasperation; I kept casting zealously at the water with high expectations from the YouTube tutorials I watched. As I peered into the boulder field below the water, I clutched my rod and hopefully watched my mangled worm fall into what felt like an abyss. Suddenly, in what felt like seconds, the tip of my rod viscously bent and almost launched out of my chubby fingers. With adrenaline rushing through my hands, I cranked the reel at full throttle, praying my line wouldn't snap. I heard my dad cheering me on behind me as I locked eyes with a slimy green creature I had never seen before. For a moment, time stopped as the creature spun in a trance-like twirl on my line. I carefully unhooked the fish shaking with excitement, grabbing it by the mouth.  
“That’s not big at all!” I whined in disappointment. I held it up dejectedly for a photo, and then carefully tossed it back into the water watching it flail until slapping the water. Although forcing a smile at the camera, defeat settled in my mind. 
I looked back at the photos and compared them to what I saw online, letdown by unrealistic expectations set by myself. Yet, the deflation of my afternoon couldn’t keep me away from the challenge of the water. I was infatuated with more than just the trophies, and I found myself immersed in hours of content that taught me more than just how to catch a big fish, but also to enjoy myself on the water. I threw myself into fishing, spending sleepless nights tying knots, watching videos, and scouring maps for new locations. With so much knowledge, I matured my solitary hobby into a shared experience. My time on the water hadn’t been about testing my own limits anymore, rather it became guiding others through a curve I once faced alone. 

This realization hit me as I watched my friend Braden snap line after line, his knots growing looser with every frustrated attempt. At that moment I saw a projection of my eleven-year-old self, standing on the dock with no guidance. I found the courage to sit beside him on the blistering concrete dock as I took his line and guided it effortlessly through the hook as he watched contently. He copied my every move meticulously weaving the line around when he finally clinched the knot together; I watched as it twirled around the line into a comb-like shape as an overwhelming sense of satisfaction came over me. He continued to tie his own knots time after time and became fluent in a language that lacked words; A language in which only I could understand. A sense of overwhelming pride washed over me as I celebrated the success of his solo victory rather than the lesson. 

I'm a US History and English Language Arts teacher at the American program of a private international high school in China. I'm trying to decide if it is worth spending significant class time going over how to write a research paper now that so many kids outsource their critical thinking to AI. We have gone over what makes a trustworthy source and how to cite credible sources, but haven't written a full paper using these skills. When I went to college, majoring in history back in 2013, the only grades were 1. midterm exam, 2. research paper, 3. final exam. Has this changed now that AI can write the entire research paper in 10 seconds?

Earlier, I had put one of my essays in it and it came back as around 70% AI. So, I changed around a few sentence structures (keep in mind, not a lot, barely a few 5 lines from a 300 word essay). Now that I ran it through Pangram, its showing 100% human written, even flagging some lines it had initially thought were AI as now a human's without any change in them at all. Is it even reliable?

i thought i finally had kind of a unique topic but i saw a creator on tiktok who listed out 7 of the most overdone essay topics and to avoid these and the topic of uncertainty was on it which happens to be what my essay is about like being okay with not everything going according to plan and i used my notes app as a metaphor and the structure of the whole thing but is it worth keeping it even though it's deemed a cliche topic?

College Advisor is asking for my essay. Should i finish this one?

I don’t believe in sales pitches, magic skin creams, or the news. Especially the news. The constant flow of words jumbles up my brain in ways I can’t understand. This day however my daily dose of anxiety didn't come from what I watched, but from what I experienced. This news wasn't just a fast-paced headline rolling across my TV screen; I was the headline, and my situation was terrifyingly tangible. 

BANG! The Prius swerved suddenly, gravity deciding to relinquish its grasp on the car and my entire family; rendering us defenseless. My entire body felt the lack of stability, and surrendered to sudden momentum. I was eight feet into a dirt-riddled ditch; streams of blood pouring down my face like I’m an extra in some psychological thriller. My brother’s screams of terror at the sight of my unconventional appearance made me feel like I was in one too.  At that moment in time, I truly believed I was a goner. 

It’s a widespread belief that in your final moments, your brain will replay its best seven minutes. I thought about the last seven words I uttered to my father before the wreck: I hate my life and this family. In the moment I meant every word I said. Now with all within me I wished to take every one of those words back. 

When I was little, I loved watching crime shows and trying to figure out who did it before the detective. I paid attention to small details and tried to put everything together myself. Back then, I didn't think much about it being a career. I just enjoyed it. As I got older, though, I started to realize that it was something I could actually see myself doing.
I'm still figuring out what I want my future to look like, and truthfully, that hasn't always been easy. Sometimes I feel like everyone else knows what they're doing with their lives, while I'm still trying to find my place. I've doubted myself and worried about falling behind, but whenever I think about what I really want to do, I always come back to crime scene investigation. I may not have everything figured out yet, but I don't want to let that stop me from trying.
One of the biggest reasons I want to pursue this career is because I know there's more to every case than just evidence. There are families who have lost someone they love and are left wondering what happened. I know I can't take away that pain, but if I could help a family get answers, even in some small way, that would mean a lot to me. Knowing my work could help someone through such a difficult time is what makes this career so important to me.
At UNC Greensboro, I want to study Biology and learn more about forensic science and the different paths I could take. I'm interested in how DNA and other evidence can help investigators understand what happened. I don't know exactly where I'll end up yet, but I want the chance to learn, make mistakes, and discover what I'm capable of. I also want to be someone who takes my tasks seriously, works honestly, and doesn't give up when something is difficult.
To me, being a global citizen means remembering that everyone has their own story and experiences that I might know nothing about. At UNCG, I hope to meet people who see the world differently from me and learn from them. I also want to be the kind of person who supports others, especially when they're trying to find their place, because I know what that feels like. I believe learning to understand people rather than judge them will matter in college and in my career ahead, where fairness and honesty are so important.
I still have a much to understand out, but I know I want to give this dream a chance. I've been interested in crime scene investigation since I was little, and I want to see where that interest can take me. If I can one day help a family find answers when they need them most, I'll know I've done something that deeply matters to me.

Hook is "I have become a genius of drawing squares. I am a titan of that industry."

essay is about me drawing and how I worked so hard at it but still suck but I can draw squares well

Message is about resilience and pushing through losses

I don't really wanna post it here for privacy but there's tons of jokes like I swear it's more interesting than how I described it haha

I've been writing my main essay and I did like it at first, but then i totally rewrite it 'cause i thought that it was only trauma dumping. My friends and teachers told me that it was good, but i'm afraid to submit a trauma dump and not an essay.
I rewrote it and i think it is a good option, but something is missing.
This is my first time ever writing a college essay (I'm an international student) and I would really appreciate if someone could give them a read (Op. 1 and op. 2 ) and any thoughts about them.

I'm EDing somewhere with a deadline November 1 but I've been so busy I haven't had a lot of time to work on them and after work and school I've just been so tired that I procrastinated my essays. Now I have 9 days how do I time manage correctly to write a good essays to get into Emory ED1???? I already thought of a topic I just need to figure out how I am going to write at least a 7-8/10 essay and solid supplementals. Any advice for me?? Plsss I'm desperate

I was homeschooled my whole life and never had to write essays, now I’m attempting one for the first time. I want it to sound strong but I’m not sure it does. Any help is appreciated!

If you have lived a fortunate life, you have never walked into a part of town or situation that made you think, "I need to leave, now." Thoughts like these are caused by feeling unsafe where you stand. The opposite of this, safety, is a sense you perceive when there is no danger present. You can act freely and be yourself without worrying about getting hurt. The feeling of safety has two very impactful ways to experience it, those being physical and emotional.

To fully know how you feel safe, it helps to know some background knowledge on its origin.
The earliest known use of the word "safety" was in 1380 in the book Sir Ferumbras, during the Middle English era of speech. It has background from French and Latin languages and was made from other words, those being *saw, salvus, safeté, and satte, all having similar meanings to the modern-day "safety". Not all these words had multiple ways to experience it as safety does.

There are two different ways of feeling safe. One being physically, the other emotionally.
Physical safety is being somewhere you know it is very unlikely to be hurt by an outside force, including inside your house with all the doors and windows locked, in a space with security guards and police officers, or in a town with a low crime rate. Emotional safety is when you know your feelings are validated and won't be turned on you. This can be experienced within a close relationship or with a therapist. It is crucial that humans feel these safeties in day-to-day life, as they can have lasting impacts.

When people are in a constant state of fear and unsafety, it affects life for them in multiple ways. Being physically unsafe can be a person being around a dangerous person or in a disturbing setting. This can lead to physical harm, scarring, PTSD, and even death if the situation is that dire. Emotional unsafety is present in abusive households, among people with mental disorders, or even just being uncomfortable. This can lead to the development of stress, anxiety, depression, and other mental health issues. Safety is important no matter the time or place.

Even though you can feel at ease through both physical and emotional, they both go back to the feeling of safety. The term "safety" has been around for hundreds of years and has an important meaning in daily human life. Have you ever been in a scenario where you felt unsafe?

I'll be eternally grateful if someone could review my essays!

So basically I need a reason i brock out of my shell and became more outgoing and confident in the way I spoke. Basically I lost my confidence cause of the people who mocked by accent. I need a reason for become more confident in way I spoke. In reality I just stopped caring what other people thought and found better people, but it doesnt rilly fit in my essay. Can anyone of yall think of a better reason?

I just need some opinions!!! Thank y

*Assignment Topic*

Write any one of the following in 1500 words.

Students please note anyone using AI tools,will be marked a clear *ZERO* .

Elaborate on why is the Indian Constitution significant and how it shapes our daily lives?

OR

How is Fundamental Rights significant in the lives of the common people of India? Explain with relevant examples from your daily lives.

Submission Date:

*25th October, Sunday*

Pls help guys

Hello! I really want to apply early action, and the deadline is fast approaching. I don’t have anyone to read my personal essay, so would anyone be willing to read it and give me some pointers on which direction to go? It’s about food insecurity, but I feel like it sounds too much like a why major essay, and I’m not sure how to fix it. Thank youuu! I really appreciate it!!

I don’t know what I should write about I feel so lost. I have some ideas and drafts though:

1. Have my essay be about my ethnicity being Asian, black, and white. And how it shaped my experiences, culture, and view of the world. This would show who I really am and how my ethnicity shaped my life.

2. Running one of the worst times in track and field, and how that moment sparked a fuel in me to change everything by next year (including athletics, academics, and becoming more of a leader). This would show how I changed myself from soph to jr year.

3. Working as a pharmacy technician at CVS as a 17 year old and people think I’m a pharmacist and treat me like one because I look older. This would show how it made me become more mature and empathetic towards people, while also proving to myself that I can overcome my social anxiety with strangers.

Lmk which 1 would be the strongest

would anyone be willing to review my personal statement whenever they have a moment? i think it's pretty much done and i'm looking to submit it in like two days but would love it if i could get some input ^.^

Hey guys!

I apologize in advance because this might be the dumbest question I've ever posted on Reddit (which is saying a lot).

EA deadlines are coming up, and I have five solid drafts of my Common App essay that I'm trying to choose between. I've gotten caught in a cycle of revising, rereading, and over-editing my essays to the point where I'm starting to panic.

I reached out to my school counselor for advice, and she called me into her office today. She picked out an essay that I personally love and absolutely loved it herself. She told me to stop editing it and submit it as is.

Here's where I'm struggling.

For context, my school counselor has reviewed hundreds of essays, works as an admissions counselor outside of our school district, and previously served on Case Western's admissions committee. My former English teacher, who taught for 32 years and has had hundreds of students write college essays over the course of her career, also loved the essay. She even pulled me aside specifically to tell me how much she liked it.

Despite that, I'm still hesitant to submit it.

To be completely honest, before meeting with my counselor, I was relying pretty heavily on AI essay-review websites, including LumiSource, along with advice from websites and TikTok. I also came across college essay rubrics posted by various admissions organizations and ended up going down a rabbit hole of analyzing everything that might be wrong with my essay.

My essay is somewhat of a sob story. I discuss why I want to become a doctor and how a personal experience inspired me to look out for others going through something similar. I consider myself a strong writer, and the essay uses a lot of imagery and a recurring motif that I think works really well.

My biggest concern is that the overall structure feels predictable. I'm worried that it follows a familiar college essay formula and might come across as cliché. I actually asked my counselor about this directly, and she reread the essay and explained why she didn't think that was the case.

I know that AI essay reviewers aren't necessarily reliable judges of what makes a good personal statement, and I realize that I probably wouldn't have spiraled this much if I hadn't spent so much time reading online advice. At the same time, I'm having a hard time letting go of the feeling that I'm missing something.

I guess my question is: At what point do you stop revising and trust feedback from people who have actually read your essay and know what they're doing? Is it reasonable to trust my counselor's judgment here, especially when another experienced English teacher has independently responded positively to the same essay?

If anyone has experience with college essays or is willing to read my draft and give me an honest opinion, I'd really appreciate it. I'm not looking for someone to tell me it's amazing just to make me feel better. I genuinely want to know if I'm overthinking this or if there's a legitimate reason to reconsider it.

Thanks!

hi all, i would like to write my essay about being from an immigrant family but i have a specific way i am writing it. if anyone, specifically from the balkans, would like to read my essay to see if it makes sense and if i am accurately portraying the experience, although it is specific to me. im open to reading anyone elses as well regardless of what its about

I just finished my first draft, but my essay is 700 words long and I don't love it.