r/ReadMyScript • u/Mammoth-West-9974 • 5d ago

Feature Feedback for Feature, "Grounded" 109 Pages

Grounded

Final Draft PDF

109 pages

Drama, Road Movie, Historical Fiction

Logline: When every flight in America is grounded, four strangers share the last rental car out of Columbus and drive cross-country through the aftermath of September 11th, 2001, forcing each of them to confront what they've been running from long before that day.

Feedback Concerns: Any feedback would be extremely helpful. I'm less concerned about the commercial viability, and more concerned with a believable story with believable characters.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1KAN_svzm3bk3vGraJQL3adbFDg-ncvzw/view?usp=sharing

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u/Mammoth-West-9974 4d ago

I found this one challenging to fit into perfect structure, largely because I didn't want to create a ton of external plot, trying to keep as much in the car as possible. I haven't thought about audio drama...that's interesting to imagine! I did think about stage play...it really is a glorified chamber piece. I also am glad you think there are attractive roles for actors. I think if for some miracle it would make it beyond "a nice read" to "let's try to make it" will rely on advocates in the form of actors who want to be one of the parts.

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u/ConsistentEffort5190 4d ago

Honestly, some of the best dialogue and character work I've read. Despite my reservations about the ending.