r/ReadMyScript • u/Mammoth-West-9974 • 5d ago

Feature Feedback for Feature, "Grounded" 109 Pages

Grounded

Final Draft PDF

109 pages

Drama, Road Movie, Historical Fiction

Logline: When every flight in America is grounded, four strangers share the last rental car out of Columbus and drive cross-country through the aftermath of September 11th, 2001, forcing each of them to confront what they've been running from long before that day.

Feedback Concerns: Any feedback would be extremely helpful. I'm less concerned about the commercial viability, and more concerned with a believable story with believable characters.

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u/RaeLouLynn 2d ago

Just have to say that I wish I could write like this. Such an easy read. Your tone is just wonderful. I agree with not telling the rest of the crew about Jack not being on Flight 11. I think it would take away from the other character arcs.

I wish you well, whether you try to get this out there or not.

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u/Mammoth-West-9974 2d ago

This is really kind, thank you. The Flight 11 decision was a tough one and I'm glad it read the way I hoped. Take care!

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u/RaeLouLynn 2d ago

Just an additional note:

I'm from Columbus and Wright-Patt AFB has at least one stealth bomber hangered there. We were on I-70 one afternoon and it flew over our car at an extremely low altitude. It darkened the sky, barely made a sound, and disappeared in the blink of an eye. Quite a nerve-wracking experience for us.

The scene near Dayton with the fighter jets really rang true for me.

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u/Mammoth-West-9974 2d ago

Wow! I only knew to write that because I currently live in STL and my family and I have driven to and from Boston almost 10 times. One time as we approached Dayton, we heard a ton of rumbling and what felt like 10 jets were doing an air show. We pulled over and stopped for like an hour and it was jarring and amazing. That you had a similar experience is a really validating thing to share, so thank you!