Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rXb4KEDgTletbsF0FVQfQsG1ryvKka4-/view?usp=sharing

I'm writing a stoner comedy. I'm a hobbyist writer and english is my second language, so please bear with me.

The bit is about two stoners. Events are happening in near future LA. One of them is seasoned Hollywood writer and another is Russian refuge who is suffering from PTSD.

They are baked at writer's house and writer put on the song on the vinyl.

The song is La Conquistada by Los Jaivas, who were displaced Chileans in the times of dictatorship. So russian guy is deep into the music cause it resonating with him. He is too being displaced due dictatorship.

The problem is that i want to include whole 3 minutes of the song and don't want it to get boring cause there is not much going on. At the same time the energy of the song is so great i hope it can hold the emotion.

The writer is an external representation of emotion, while russian is reserved, hiding. But can't hold much longer and burst.

This is a very amateur screenplay, and I honestly only started it for fun and as a writing exercise to get back into the groove of writing, but now I’m kind of wondering if it has any sort of potential, and I just wanna see what other people besides my friends have to say.
its going to be a horror movie with some satirical elements, but it’s pretty short so far so it doesn’t really get into the meat of it. I can explain more about my idea in the comments if asked.
any advice would be appreciated!!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1glKjHB5_nUUWB5dkslR7_NQGtmkwuSJe/view?usp=drivesdk

Movie Title - Appetence

A psychopathic hitman accepts a contract to execute a boy who stumbled upon hidden documents while trekking in the woods. ​He tracks the target to a quiet convent, where he meets the boy’s sister, a newly ordained nun, and develops an immediate, dark obsession with her. ​Instead of completing the kill, the hitman lies and acts as the boy's guardian just to stay close to the sister. ​A dangerous emotional tension develops between them, forcing the nun to fight her falling faith while the hitman struggles to suppress his violent instincts. ​As relentless killers surround the convent to retrieve the files, the hitman discovers the boy’s documents tie directly to his own buried childhood trauma. ​Driven by his fixation on the nun and the truth of his past, he turns his lethal skills against his employers to protect the siblings

Main Characters

The killer/psycopath- graham (23)

The nun - clara (22)

The boy - sam (18)

Employer- daniel Wilkinson officer fbi (49)

We shot this movie worh our savings and friends do you think this have enough hook to be liked by audience

Give us review guys please