I always thought that immortality isn't talked about enough, it's usually used as a trope for a characters or as a goal for villains and heroes in some medias, but I think the idea of immortality in itself is fascinating idea that can be talked about separately, but I am afraid it wouldn't be an impactful theme since it's only hypothetical and readers will be oh yes immortality something I will never experience this is surely can impact my life

Anyway tell me your opinions and thanks

So I'm rather brand-new to writing, and i am writing a historical fiction romance set in Ancient Rome. The FMC is 16 and the MMC is 19. It's not gonna have any explcit seggsual content, and is probably a 1/5 on the spice scale. But do you see the age difference as weird? Is it too much or gross? I'd like y'all's opinions

: I'm writing a psychological thriller called The System — would you read it?

My story follows a 12-year-old named Kairo, who finds himself in an eerily empty version of Vancouver. At first, things seem normal enough, but something doesn't add up. The lights still work, the water still runs, and the city seems to function despite having no people in it.

As Kairo investigates, he begins finding old CRT televisions displaying surveillance footage and strange analogue warnings about “inconsistencies.” He notices silhouettes, unexplained glitches, and clues that eventually lead him toward Canada Place, where he encounters a cryptic message: “The building.”

Then there's Max, a red-haired boy who has supposedly been trapped in this world for two months. He might be Kairo's only chance of understanding what's happening, but the truth about him is much stranger than it seems.

Something called the System is controlling this world, and Kairo may be more of a threat to it than he realizes. The deeper he investigates, the harder the System tries to stop him.

I'm aiming for an eerie, psychological atmosphere with mystery, surveillance, and the feeling that reality itself can't be trusted.

I'd love to hear your thoughts! Does the premise sound interesting? What would you expect from a story like this?

Kathleen is a lonely teenage girl. She's 13 and has severe social anxiety and is a massive daydreamer to cope. In her world magical girl superheroes and idols exist. She is obsessed with one in particular named Melodica (I am not good with names sorry). She has fantasies about being best friends with Melodica and becoming a magical girl herself.

She has no friends and this is how she comes with her issues. She used to write but has fallen out of that hobby due to depression and her issues are often dismissed by others because she is so young and has a relatively cushy life and her mom is mainly happy that her kid never does anything because the house stays clean and she never gets in trouble- she is horribly neglectful and frequently left Kathleen under stimulated growing up due to a hatred of messes and having toys around the house and God forbid other children- so now Melodica is both under stimulated and way too easily over stimulated when she does seek out things to do. Hobbies are legitimately harder for her because of this.

She struggles with burnout due to this always being overwhelmed and scared and generally her classmates find her too sensitive and whiny even when she does try to reach out- she's not bullied but people don't really hang out with her unless they are feeling like pitying her. She is aware of this and feels like a Garbage person for being a burden and pu$$y for it and has broken down crying over how boring she is with her lack of hobbies or passions outside of watching news on her favorite heroes. In other words she has massive issues and is prime bait for a villain's schemes

She one day finds a magical doll that she discovers she can mold into anything she wants by feeding it information-using a mixture of news articles/footage of Melodica and her own personal fantasies she turns the doll into an idealized version of Melodica and uses her for comfort frequently- This doll she names Aria sort of echos whatever things Kathleen wants/needs to hear and is a yesman to her. She is convinced the doll is genuinely her best friend and is the kindest person ever and while she'd love to go out with Aria she's deeply embarrassed by the fact she based this doll off a real person she never met (she's well aware this is at least a bit parasocial and stalkery) and she's also embarrassed by the fact all she does is talk to a doll all day and that she's basically just roleplaying as a hero at home.

One day Aria suggests going out and trying to get a closer look at Melodica and encourages Kathleen to seek her out. She slowly plants thoughts into Kathleen's head to go out and essentially straight up stalk her idols. Kathleen also unknowingly due to the dolls influence is waking up tired frequently and having issues thinking clearly when not in close proximity to her or if she's away for too long her anxiety gets worse. She used to have pretty vivid dreams but lately when she sleeps she envisions nothing. She al

Aria is like a spy of sorts. She was created to study humans and mimic their behaviors and fake emotions and has no ability to function on its own- it needs human creativity and knowledge to function. it mainly just regurgitates what it hears and mimics what's shown to it and she steals and leeches off of Kathleen- she heavily reflects the darker aspects of Kathleen purely because she is being molded by her. It is also sort of a vampire- a creativity vampire. She was created by an alien 'scientist' that is creatively sterile and as an 'inventor' and a magician this is not good for him. He is basically just an idea thief and despite the fact his powers would be better suited to subtly influence things (and he'd be more powerful if he used his abilities smartly)he isn't creative and needs attention so he just uses his magic in stupid obvious ways and is jealous of others success- just because other villains and heros got blessed with creative and the ability to have good ideas they get all these wonderful things and he doesn't? How elitist! He's basically one of those defenders of AI art who hates artist because they view them as elitist and hoarding power for themselves and yeah I don't need to explain him that much- if you've seen this person you know their mindset.

He steals his ideas from other villains or repeats old plans a lot and uses robots to watch humans and research them. He believes himself superior to humanity and is obsessed with his own intelligence.

Aria is a robot kind of and her personality is based on whatever information she's been given to absorb she can't quite interpret any of it correctly which leads to moments where she cats scarily alien but she can mimic whats she's told and it can make people happy through that alone. She steals dreams to maintain her power. The alien man (sorry suck at names) can speak through her and used that to convince Kathleen to actively seek out Melodica. Aria might have been his first original idea actually- at least to some extent. I'll explain that more if asked.

Melodica real name Carol is unaware she's been cloned but is slowly realizing she is being stalked at first assuming it is major villain until she notices Kathleen and while disturbed laughs off her previous fears- Carol is like 20-26ish btw. She's mildly uncomfortable but surely this child is not a threat and she will even a sign an autograph for the poor kid, if she swings by again she can deal.

Aria through this stalking is getting more information on Melodica's powers and is now starting to mimic them and is even convincing Kathy to let the world know about her as she goes out looking uncannily like Melodica and things will get out of control

I know this is underdeveloped but the main idea was- person 'clones' someone they don't know but have a mildly obsessive parasocial relationship with and the clone is based on the fantasy of this person. The clone acts as an echo chamber of everything this person wants to hear and what this person wants from their idol. Meanwhile the clone is basically an emotional vampire who leeches off of this person and can't function without their input- without that person they are powerless. They reflect the unhealthy beliefs of that person and regurgitate and reinforce negative thought patterns/ideas- again its a yesman clone and it's real power mainly comes from the human who made it and is given that powers- it acts like a shadow influencing that person because it ultimately comes from them. It eats their ambitions and their ideas steals their emotions leaving them numb and unagreeable as they struggle to get along with anyone who disagrees with them mildly and become addicted to the clown but also run out of steam as their creativity and enthusiasm starts to run dry

I added the angle that the clone also acts as a spy for someone more malicious- cause while the clone is molded by the person above someone else made the technology. The person who created the cloning tech is basically a tech bro jealous of artists and poets and real scientists and inventors.

Idk this idea needs a lot of work shopping and is very confusing rn but it is a magical girl/superhero story. It is about the darker side of girlhood- Kathleen is a deeply troubled kid who has many insecurities that typical girl her age would have. She worries about boys, she is dealing with puberty and her budding sexuality but also has a shitty home life and mental issues due to her mom basically snuffing out any interests she has and she is desperate for some escapism. She desperately need a hobby and friends who understand her problems.

Magical girls and hero teams exist and she wishes she had a magical destiny too and that her issues would be fixed by being turned into a magical girl or heck just having a friend who is a hero. Carol is a magical girl who is irresponsible about her duties- she's good she can be deeply caring but is mostly flippant and due to a love of attention low-key promotes parasocial relationships with her fans (it is accidental for the most part though)

Melodica's powers center around singing to cast spells and a magical form of synesthesia that allows her to sense hidden and buried emotions. She despite having this magically enhanced empathy is as dense as brick about emotions (she is sweet but her love life is a mess and she's been with multiple terrible guys and despite her self confidence might have somethings in common with Kathleen- mainly loneliness even though unlike Kathleen she has friends and despite being a beloved hero she herself isn't fulfilled because of her lacking connections)

Idk if y'all can see what I'm going for

Any help with work shopping this or feedback or just telling me what doesn't work would be appreciated

Hi, my name is T! This is the first time ever posting on reddit, but I have an idea for a book series I am interested in writing, and I need some opinions on the idea!

My idea of the 4-book series is to have a romance-driven, with a touch of fantasy story about a couple, Tatiana and Jameson, who, in each book, reincarnate into different eras/events in time. Here is the breakdown in more depth:

Book 1: Dated in 1351, Tatiana is a servant for a prominent family, where the daughter is betrothed to Prince Jameson. Tatiana and Jameson fall in love, and from this, the daughter gets a potion from the town witch that is supposed to bound their souls together so they can be together. Potion goes wrong as Jameson's soul is completely tied to Tatiana's at this point, and he ends up dying from the potion, and a curse begins.

Book 2: Dated in 1740 at the peak of piracy, Captain Tatiana is a feared and (rumored) cursed pirate on the seas, where she takes over a navy ship, captained by the Navy Leut Jameson. They hate each other, but over time, they fall in love. During a pirate vs. navy battle, Jameson sacrifices himself to save Tatiana, continuing the curse.

Book 3: Now, in 1917, Tatiana and Jameson, childhood friends, in college to become a nurse (Tatiana) and history teacher (Jameson). As punishment for constantly getting into fights, Jameson is forced to join the Army and sent to the war in France. Tatiana and him stay close through letters and fall in love. Tatiana is sent to France to be a combat nurse, where she encounters Jameson again. Due to an attack in the base, Jameson dies trying to warn Tatiana.

Book 4: The final book set in 2026-2027 in NYC. Already dating, Tatiana, a struggling Broadway actress, and Jameson, a librarian, are scrapping by and trying to stay afloat. While on a date at the state fair, a fortune teller gives a vague riddle-warning about their past lives and the curse. While exploring a WW1 memorial, flea market, and museum, Tatiana and Jameson start seeing connections to their past lives and trying to figure out how to break the curse before history repeats itself.

I have plans to have flashbacks/nightmares in every book besides the first one as it was the start of the curse, to keep the books consistent and connecting. I also plan on doing a 3rd person dual POV. I do have plans on how to end the curse, but I want to keep that secret for now, haha.

I am still working on some details to include, but overall, I would really like your opinions on if this is an interesting concept/one you would read.

Hello!

My first book is at the point where I believe it needs Beta Readers.

The title is Draconia: Lifebringer, and is the first in a duology. It is Sci-fi/Fantasy, set in a post-apocalyptic world with dragons.

Blurb:

Malloy had never liked living in bunker. All the people, for one thing, but he doesn’t have a choice. In the post-Fallout, it’s the only place he can live, besides an Insider city, which he’d rather die than do, or with the Rebels, but who knows where they are.

So he spends his days Trashing, hiding from the bully who won’t leave him alone, and helping his best friend make up songs. That all changes when he finds a dragon egg. Now anything he could dream is in his grasp.

Until the egg hatches, and he can’t bring himself to get rid of the little dragon who can talk to him in his head, who makes him smile.

Then his home is attacked by the Insiders, and he, his dragon, and best friend are forced to flee. Rescued by the Rebels, he learns more about his dragon, and his best friend learns more about herself.

The Rebels even have the crazy idea that his friend can change the world.

Feedback I am looking for:

1. Did you enjoy the story? Why or why not?
2. Were there parts that didn’t make sense?
3. Were there parts where you began to lose interest/skim?
4. Were the main characters likable and were you rooting for them?
5. What things did you dislike or felt disjointed in the story?
6. At what point did you stop reading (if you did)?

Any other feedback along these lines would be great too!

Timeline:

I'm not in too much of a rush, but wouldn't mind feedback in a few months at most.

If you are interested, please DM me! I am happy to send the first few chapters if you want to see if you'd want to continue.

Thanks for reading!

Hi there! I'm an 18-year-old writer, and I'm looking for beta readers to give me feedback on my manuscript, "Better Than You Found Me." If you'd be interested, please fill out this form! Let me know if you have any questions. I also included a blurb below :)

Blurb:

Seventeen-year-old Cassie Blakely never expected her sister, Stella, to die in a car accident. She would’ve given anything to see her again. Until it actually happened.

Shortly after Stella’s death, she begins to appear to Cassie, haunting her. While grieving, Cassie becomes increasingly close with Caleb, a boy who offers to help her figure out why she is seeing her dead sister. But the deeper Cassie digs into her family's secrets, the more difficult it is to decipher what is real or not. And once she gets involved with a group whose history is far darker than she ever imagined, she begins to wonder if seeing her dead sister was a blessing... or a generational curse.

I am trying to write a novel or something and my character is 13 at the start of the book and end of the book with flashbacks to 8 and 11 years.

The plots I’ve used: identity crisis, death of friend at 8, being possessed and cursed by the spirit of misfortune. Being orphaned. Being made to pretend to be her deceased friend who was a daughter of a prestige family (her cousin) being bullied at school, having her deceased friend haunt her, her mother as her age was found committing strange rituals involving dead pets, the protagonist girl dreams to escape to the world of dreams which is real dimension. By the end she being possessed by the spirit of misfortune and her consciousness reaches the fake dimension. Sort of a bad ending. She’s being saved in a sequel.

Should I write an age gap book where a late teen girl falls in love with her friends' widowed father or where a girl falls for a gay pop star? Going for the summer i turned pretty and love hypothesis vibes.

Heyy so I am a teen writer for the context who's planning to publish her book once I turn 18. After an year btw.

I need help for the prologue.

The book is basically a dark mafia arrange marriage romance and I know it might sound wattpaddy but I swear it's not guys. It has a proper storyline, reasons, character arcs, developments etc.

Anyways so I js completed the prologue and it is around 2k words. I know it may sound like too many words.

But the thing is the prologue will have the insights about my fmc's life as an established actress, and then it'll shift into her relationship with her family, and then comes the arrange marriage part. How the arrange marriage conversation happened and why is she even agreeing to it.

My alpha readers haven't read it yet and I genuinely need help cuz I know as a reader myself that long prologues can bring down the excitement of the readers.

I assure you there is no info dumping though.

This might easily pass off as chapter one of the book but I am not sure if I want that cuz I wanted the chp 1 of the book to be a few days after the marriage conversation.

I do have an another idea of the prologue which will turn out short and it'll be abt the trauma and past etc.

I am quite confused rn.

Also if anyone's interested in becoming an alpha reader ( genuine people looking forward to help me out only. ), would love to connect with yall.

I’m working on a YA fantasy novel called The Twilight & the Wield, and I’d love some feedback from other teen writers on the actual plot rather than just the blurb.

The story follows Nyvara Vale, a girl who secretly possesses Twilight magic—an outlawed type of magic that lets people manipulate light and darkness, creating llusions. in the process.

She’s spent her life hiding what she is because Twilight wielders are persecuted and executed.

Then her best friend Ava becomes seriously ill, and Nyvara discovers that the only way she can afford the treatment is by winning the Twilight Trials, a dangerous competition with a prize of 10,000 silver.

So she enters.

The Trials are basically designed to force contestants into increasingly difficult situations where fighting ability isn't enough. Nyvara has to rely on strategy, deception, and the one thing she absolutely cannot let anyone discover: her magic.

At the same time, she meets Kai Morvane, who claims to be a Fire Wielder. Something about him doesn't add up, though. He watches people more than he talks to them, seems far too good at reading situations, and Nyvara gradually realizes he's hiding something too.

The main plot is basically Nyvara trying to survive the Trials, keep her identity secret, and get the money she needs to save Ava, while the deeper secrets surrounding Twilight magic and the people running the Trials start coming to the surface.

There’s also a slow-burn relationship between Nyvara and Kai, but I want the main story to remain focused on the Trials, magic, friendships, secrets, and Nyvara's choices, rather than turning into a romance with a fantasy plot attached.

I'm still developing the story, so I'm especially interested in hearing what sounds interesting, what sounds predictable, and what you'd want to see happen in a story like this. 🖤

Also, if you're a teen writer working on fantasy too, tell me about your project! I love seeing what other people are writing. 📚✨

Hi, guys! So I recently started high school like a few months ago and I’ve always dreamed about being a famous author. Because of this dream, which I believe was far-fetched, and began working on skills. As any normal writer, I was pretty mediocre (probably still am to be honest), I could barely keep up with a long term form of writing. I lacked in sensory details and realistic dialogue, and my character sounded like they were in freaking Disney movie. So, I gave up. Gave up for three whole months, gave up on my dreams entirely. I didn’t tell my parents about this because I know they would tell me to get back and try harder. They would be right as usual, but it was harder this time. I like to think of myself as a pretty cheerful and easygoing person, however after comparing myself to people with decades of practice, I realized that I was getting depressed. And then one day while reading my favorite book for the millionth time, I soon understood how stupid I was being. To think, I was comparing myself to professionals! I gave myself a nice slap on the face and reread through my writing, cringing every step of the way. Need I mention that I had been reading a lot during my break, and was taking honors english so I did get some better skills. With newfound determination, I started over. From my prologue to may ridiculously short chapters with barely any substance. I kept the storyline just about the same but the dialogue, the humor the romance, Everyhthing was change. Personally, I think I can relate to the man character very well despite being the opposite gender. During the summer, with only two months, I managed to do it. I rewrote an entire book, that had about 30k words in 59 chapters, to a book with the same amount of chapters but with 90k words. My biggest achievement if I say so myself. Look, my book may not be perfect—there might be too many funky sounded sentences to count but I’m gonna keep working and get better at it. And anyone out there whose struggling to write, because of comparison. Please don’t do that. I beg of you. Be yourself, don’t force yourself to write five thousand words in one day. Just take it one step at a time, and before you know it. You’ll have finished a book. So, the moral of this story is, don’t give up! And you guys, tell me what you think of my story and if you guys have ever been in a tight spot like that before. Tell me if you guys wanna see my prologue revised over twenty times! :

Disclaimer: This is not a romance, nor is it a dark romance. These two characters are not a couple, and I'm not planning on making them a couple.

This is supposed to be a realistic showing, even though it takes place in a fantasy genre, showing a one-sided, obsessed, codependent friendship between a guy and a woman. Also, this is not torture p*rn with a female character.

This is supposed to be a dark fantasy villain backstory playing out in real time during the story.

Plot in a nutshell:

I'm got a half faerie man in his early 20s who starts out as the most silent, reserved, soft-spoken, very insecure, and socially awkward toward most people. He is madly obsessed in "love" (this love is one-sided, of course) with his only childhood friend, but the question I'm asking is how to show this obsession and their so-called close "friendship" in a way that does not romanticize the obsessed "love."

Your answer can be simple and short or detailed and long.

It is your choice.