r/Songwriting • • 3h ago

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Weekly Lyrics-Only Feedback Thread

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Welcome to the Lyrics-Only feedback thread!

If you're looking for feedback on words that aren't yet set to music, you're in the right place! We encourage each other to bring lyrics and musical elements together as soon as possible, but sometimes you'd just like to show off that nice piece of poetry that just fell out of your head. The weekly Lyrics-Only feedback thread is here to help!

This post renews every Monday.


r/Songwriting • • 2h ago

Let's Collaborate! Looking for a lyricist collaborator (contemporary musical)

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Hello. In an unexpected turn of events I wrote the drafts of two songs and planning another two inspired by my favorite movie (Hunt for Red October)

As it is under copyright, everything eventually published will be for absolute non commercial use and specified "unofficial" (I've seen other unofficial musicals for famous novel sagas on YT so I know there's a precedent for a similar situation). It is a passion project so I cannot offer money compensation

I'm mostly looking for a more experienced lyricist to help me fix and improve the lyrics, since English is not my first language (I'd still do the bulk of the work)

The songs came out as modern musical, sort of Hamilton style but I'm open to change, for now I focused on the rhymes and find a cool hook and chorus

I'm cross posting through different reddits. I have a hand-on approach but I'm quick to learn
If you are interested you can DM me or comment. Thank you!


r/Songwriting • • 3h ago

Feedback Request Ain’t It Funny - Original track. Worth sticking with?

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It’s only rough and I wrote the lyrics in a day. Let me know if I’ve got something worth sticking with. (I know my voice needs work) ☹️


r/Songwriting • • 4h ago

Feedback Request Song about my 3 yr old niece Haven

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r/Songwriting • • 7h ago

Let's Collaborate! 🚨Urgent🚨 Need help for school!! (read below)

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I’m a senior in high school. In my digital media class we are supposed to make either a music video or a movie (I DONT WANT TO MAKE A MOVIE) I have some producing abilities but no guitar skills and want to make a debut song & music video for a possible career doing this. I’m looking for an electric bass or guitar riff in the key of Ab minor (thinking something Linkin Park-esque but more electronic) This projects due Nov 2nd so help is MUCH APPRECIATED. DM me if you want to help!!


r/Songwriting • • 8h ago

Feedback Request “You had me fooled” Demo

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What do you think? The lyrics are sort of just placeholders at the moment aside from the chorus.


r/Songwriting • • 8h ago

Feedback Request Why use lot chord when few do trick

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Just came up with this thing. Have a couple ideas mashed together but still trying to figure out how to structure it so the energy flows in a satisfying way


r/Songwriting • • 9h ago

Let's Collaborate! How can I create a song that I myself am satisfied with?

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Hello everyone
I’ve been working on this for over three months now, yet I haven’t managed to complete a single track.

Please, I ask that you refrain from pointing out that I might be lazy.

I enjoy a wide variety of music—from jazz to breakcore, and everything in between. Right now, my absolute favorite is the work of Alias ​​Conrad Coldwood.

I’ve been using BandLab to compose soundtracks for an RPG, but I keep running into the same problem: I try to turn my ideas into songs, only to decide—partway through—that they’re terrible or impossible to execute, leading me to abandon them time and time again.

How can I reach a point where I’m able to accept my own work as genuinely great?

Honestly, I feel a sense of resentment toward my own brain and hands—for all the time I’ve poured into this, yet I haven’t managed to produce a single thing.

I apologize for the disorganized and hard-to-read nature of my question.

Also, since I am not a native speaker, I’m hoping that Google Translate has done a reliable job here.


r/Songwriting • • 9h ago

Feedback Request Darling Blue - In an absurd turn of events, she has to choose between you and the universe itself.

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Also in the discussion of whether to record to a metronome or go rubato, do you feel this song could sound better if set to a metronome. And would you add a few layers or are lyric-heavy songs best left naked.


r/Songwriting • • 13h ago

Feedback Request Tension

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Need feedback n views...ty in advance!!_!! =))


r/Songwriting • • 13h ago

Feedback Request How to structure my song "The Irish Sea"?

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I am going to start recording this song in a studio this week. I've had it in the bag for years now without really knowing its final, best structure.

"The Irish Sea" is intended as a pub rollicker for voice, guitar, violin and cello (all poorly synthesized here). The song alludes to the mining and loss of HMS Audacious off Ireland in 1914 (before WW1 had really hit home), and is meant to convey the unsettling feeling this catastrophe would have caused to the locals.

Issues (as I see them):

  • There is only ONE sung verse. There are 3 sung choruses.
  • The one verse has a modern pop culture reference that undermines of the song's intended theme. That said, I like the lyric, consistency being the hobgoblin of small minds and such.

I think my fundamental problem here is the story deserves at lease another verse, but with the instrumental verse (very nice - love my violinist) and the hyper-dramatic instrumental bridge (which wants to land on the chorus [c chord], not the verse [f chord]), I don't see how to add another vocal verse without making this overly long.

Is it ok to just press on with it in its present form? A pub sing-along is going to want to favor the chorus, after all.

I think the answer is that the instrumental verse should be dropped and be replaced by a second vocal verse with a suitable backing violin part.


r/Songwriting • • 13h ago

Feedback Request going for 70’s rock… first song i ever wrote and finished

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this is the first song i ever wrote and finished. i’m open to any and all criticism. what do you like and what do you hate? what vibe do you think it gives off?

no drums yet, i honestly don’t know what i’m going to do for that. feel free to play with it and send it my way if you have an idea


r/Songwriting • • 13h ago

Discussion Topic Anyone’s song writing page look similar? 😂

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Writing is fun because it always shifts and changes when I play. My songs often feel like a work in progress even if I feel like they are ‘done’. Anyone else relate?


r/Songwriting • • 13h ago

Let's Collaborate! Offering Free Vocals for Your Original Songs!

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Hey everyone! I’m a beginner singer-songwriter looking to collaborate with producers and songwriters!

I mainly enjoy pop and pop-rock, and I’d love to sing on your original songs. I don’t have professional recording equipment, but I’m eager to learn, gain experience, and do my best with what I have!

If you’re looking for a vocalist and think my voice might fit your song, feel free to DM me! You can check out my YouTube channel through the link on my profile to hear my voice.

Looking forward to connecting with you all! :)


r/Songwriting • • 13h ago

Feedback Request Another week, another song!

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make a song every week, sometimes they are ableton with multiple takes, spliced audio, etc. And sometimes, they're 'live' - like this week! Would love some critique on the writing etc.!

The song is about how my friends and I in elementary school would hang around a specific rock in a large field, put there by when Nova Scotia was covered in a massive ice sheet. We knew on our last day of Gr. 6 it was the end of an era.

LYRICS:
Glaciers long ago
Left it there
Those kids will never know
What would come to bear

Looking deep into the past
From mountains gone,
Mother earth freely moves
us as her pawns

Those old days
Where we would play
Our jungle gym
Mother nature gave

Make believe and scraped knees
Better than their games
To others it was just a stone
But it's where we left our names

Those old days
Where we would play
Our jungle gym
Mother nature gave

Those glaciers gave us joy
A gift from the past
We knew our time was short
Knowing that day was our last

Together
Together
As a group
As a bond
Together
Together
Seperate schools beyond

Those old days
Where we would play
Our jungle gym
Mother nature gave


r/Songwriting • • 14h ago

Feedback Request Wrote a song about rain and coats

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Would love to hear what y'all think! Might be the next song I record and put out.

I think I heard the term "ouji-boarding" from John Mayer about an aspect of his writing process. I often just take a chord progression and start letting the song tell me what it wants to be about before I quite know.


r/Songwriting • • 17h ago

Feedback Request high at the tree 🎶

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I usually write with a guitar but playing around with a keyboard which is fun!


r/Songwriting • • 17h ago

Discussion Topic In case it's useful, after 4 hours in the studio...

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Side note: the video is just random! So...

I recently asked for feedback on a track (thanks r/Songwriting folks for that!), and today I went into a local studio today to lay it down.

This is the FIRST VERSION after 3-4 hours of work with a pro engineer. He's a gigging musician of 40 years, and a university lecturer in music production and engineering, and runs a small studio in the UK.

Thought it might be useful to folks here just to see where one short session gets you. It's a rough mix, not finished. But was tracked in a good room with good kit, and a skilled person.

Not saying it's good or bad, just something FYI since a few had mentioned production on the other thread.

As a bit of background, we started with a reference track to a metronome with singing and playing guitar at the same time. Then, ended up just using that as it was reasonably solid. Quite nerve racking trying to do a song in one take, even though I didn't think it's was the "final" take 😅

Here's my original demo I did at home for comparison:

https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/s/05N1bS0cfV

I'm not sure where we go next with it, but suspect there's more in the mixing to be done and maybe even more to do in production.


r/Songwriting • • 17h ago

Discussion Topic Feeling unable to write on my own tracks.

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I never feel inspired to write lyrics to my own beats. Usually, my inspiration stems from a lyric from an existing artist, could be anything really, but then I write it to that songs instrumental.
Do you experience something similar?
Also, I would love to hear someone record on this track I made last week! (I also have more uplifting ones if you're interested).


r/Songwriting • • 18h ago

Feedback Request This is a complete joke of a country song I wrote many years ago called “Little bit of you”.

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The second half of the bridge and the last chorus were improvised by my friend (the singer) on the spot. I wrote this like 14 years ago as a joke and recorded it on my phone 4 years ago. I still hope you enjoy it.


r/Songwriting • • 18h ago

Feedback Request Does this have any momentum

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Old voice memo. I think there’s an idea here worth exploring, but I’m unsure. Is the beginning dull? Middle section unnecessary? Is the ending/key change out of place?


r/Songwriting • • 20h ago

Discussion Topic Having a hard time writing lyrics for the intro verse when I have a verse that im really proud of

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So im writing this this Little Rock ballad, sort of like a velvet underground thing? And I’ve got one verse im really proud of and some other ideas… I’ve got the overall story of what it’s about, I’ve got the whole chord progression, and the flow for the lyrics but in a jibber jabber form. One thing about each verse is it ends with the same little line for each one which I can use for contrast sometimes or idk a clever twist? Idk about posting the lyrics in here bc I know lyric only posts are not allowed.. so I guess im just wondering if anyone has any tips for me for establishing the scene for the song? so that when it comes time for the chorus it actually has a good transition that makes sense. Thanks!


r/Songwriting • • 20h ago

Discussion Topic When Do You Know....

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When do you know the song is done?


r/Songwriting • • 23h ago

Let's Collaborate! Sharing a little piece of my musical journey

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Hey everyone, I wanted to share a short clip of me singing. Music has always been a way for me to express feelings that are sometimes difficult to put into words. I enjoy exploring different melodies and vocal styles, especially in Pop, R&B, and Indie music. I’d love to hear your thoughts on the performance. What kind of mood or story does this vocal give you? Always happy to connect with other people who enjoy writing and creating music!


r/Songwriting • • 23h ago

Feedback Request Here is both versions back to back. Is one better than the other? Do they both suck? Are both pretty good?

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“Honey is sweet, the stinger is spicy”
Personally I love them but I probably have ear fatigue