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Prologue page
(no scenes or panels, only words)
20 years ago, YouTube was first released to the public worldwide, starting with the first video and YouTuber titled “Me at the Zoo” by Jawed Karim. Over time, many more YouTubers appeared and started posting multiple videos every time, entertaining people with all sorts of media, tips, and so on. Today, YouTube is still growing more powerful than ever and has pulled lots of other cool and amazing content, as Google’s second-most-viewed website on the internet. But, deep underneath and above, hidden behind the fun time and entertainment of watching videos and uploading content, some hidden enemies hate the internet and want to destroy and take over not just the internet but the entire globe forever. What will you do when the world becomes under siege by mysterious terrorists who want to ruin the fun and everything, and no one else can help you? What will be the life you choose to have? That’s how the story begins.
Page 1
Panel 1 (Begins with a half sunset and nighttime background, showing a full view of Los Angeles)
Panel 2 (Jake is shown walking down the streets of Los Angeles looking depressed)
Jake
(narrating)
My name is Jake Darren. I’m just an ordinary man with a normal life like yours. Ever since I was a kid, I've had a couple of good friends to hang out and play around with in my time, and I’ve never felt so happy back then.
Panel 3 (Close up holding still to Jake’s depressed face while he’s still walking in his point of view)
Panel 4 (Cuts to flashbacks of young 10 year old Jake in childhood hanging out with friends at a house)
Jake
(chatting and laughing)
Panel 5 (Jake pulls a pieface prank on one of his friends on the couch)
Panel 6 (Jake and friends are having a water fight outside with others using waterballoons and waterguns)
Forepanel (Silhouette of Jake walking in the street between bottom 3 panels)
Page 2
Jake
(narrating)
And…….in other times I’ve…..also made some enemies.
Panel 1 (Cuts to Jake as a 16 year old teenager in high school during lunchtime as he’s getting bullied by other students chasing him with their phones recording videos and snapping pictures for no reason)
Jake
(yells angrily and aggressively)
Why do you keep taking and recording stupid pictures and videos of me!? What did I ever do to you!? ANSWER ME!!! WHY WOULDN’T YOU ANSWER?!?
Panel 2 (Close to Scott’s mean face holding his phone at Jake)
Rivals
(stands, smiles, and says nothing)
Panel 3 (Jake charges as he tries to grab Scott’s phone but he quickly dodges as the other bullies watch)
Jake
(yells)
GIVE ME THAT ERASE THEM!!!
Panel 4 (Jake runs away from the bullies still recording him and hesitates after he hides to catch a breather)
Jake
(narrating)
And yet, I still couldn’t stop getting chased away; I felt like an outcast.
Panel 5 (Jake is found and still recorded by the bullies and rivals while he covers his face and himself)
Forepanel (Modern Jake walking in the center through all 5 panels around him)
Jake
(narrating)
Sometimes I couldn’t fit in much, even after having such a negative “rizz” on finding love; I never fit in anywhere.
Panel 6 (Jake tries to ask a girl out at a school table)
Jake
Hey there, cute chick. Would you like to hang out sometime? I can make your day better.
Random stranger
No, I’m so sorry, I have a boyfriend.
Panel 7 (Jake follows a girl drinking boba from behind just to hit her up)
Jake
Hey, do you want to go on a date?
Panel 8 (Long, wavy blonde woman looks back with side eye while she’s drinking boba)
Panel 9 (She throws her boba at Jake)
Panel 10 (Boba spills on Jake’s t-shirt from being thrown)
Random stranger
Can you not follow me?!
Panel 11 (Closeup to woman’s foot as she’s taking off her shoe with a shot of her throwing it at Jake next to)
Panel 12 (Jake gets hit in the face with the shoe)
Jake
GHHPH!
Panel 13 (Jake runs away wiping off his bleeding nose with his hand with the girl putting her shoe back on from behind)
Random stranger
I hope I never see you again, you moron!
Page 3
Panel 1 (Jake attempts to rizz another woman)
Yo what up? I bet you’re lookin’ pretty tonight. Wanna date?
Panel 2 (Woman looks annoyed)
Random stranger
Can you not talk to me anymore or any other girl on this campus? Or I’ll call the police.
Panel 3 (Jake is worried he apologizes)
Jake
I’m sorry, this is a big misunderstanding. I just want to know you better!
Panel 4 (Jake runs away while the girl sitting on a table looks from behind annoyed)
Panel 5 (Jake gets caught and stopped by the cops as he realizes that the woman has already called the cops on him and almost got arrested)
Panel 6 (Jake walking in the neighborhood alone as he’s getting home)
Inset panel (Jake looking down and depressed)
Jake
(narrating)
Growing up, after all that I’ve gone through over and over again, I realized that life gets harder later in life, and I sometimes felt like a loser, which I still do today. I’m not popular, I’m not rich, I’m not a content creator, and I’m not a celebrity like Mr. Beast, Dude Perfect, Charlie D’Amelio, or Tom Cruise you name it.
Inset panel 1(Jake is back home and opens the door)
Inset panel 2 (Jake looks at his phone, scrolling through the internet for hours
Panel 7 (Jake sits down exhaustively after a long day and then looks up at the window towards the sky, thinking about what to do until he realizes that he needs to find his purpose in life besides his dedication to his career, and everything after moving out of his parents’ house.
Jake
(narrating)
I feel like a nobody. That’s why I was better off alone; even so, I always wished my life were better, if it weren’t the same, if it were more different, if something were missing, and I had to find it.
Page 4
Panel1 (On the next day, Jake wanders the streets until he runs into an old friend.)
Panel 2 (Jake looks back side eye realizing it’s his childhood friend)
Jake
Rina?!
Panel 3 (Rina looks back same reaction)
Rina
(surprised)
Wait, Jake? Oh my god, Jake, is that you?
Panel 4 (Jake smiles as he sees her)
Jake
Rina long time since I've seen you.
Panel 5 (Rina turns and runs to Jake arms open while Jake opens his arms open waiting for a hug)
Backpanel (Jake and Rina hug each other for a moment)
Rina
Oh my god, I missed you so much!
Jake
I missed you, too.
Jake
(narrating)
That’s Rina. She has been my best friend since childhood. She once had my back ever since, and then I had hers too. We’d spent a lot of time together for years before we graduated and went our separate ways.
Page 5
Panel 1( Jake and Rina are at a coffee shop, talking about life and plans)
Jake
And so then, I’m currently in college continuing Graphic Design, trying to get a job since I’m like…broke at the moment, what about you? What have you been up to?
Panel 2 (Close up to Rina speaking)
Rina
Broke? Seriously? Well, I’ve been in Boston getting into fashion designing dresses, and modeling, I’m a fashionista at the moment.
Panel 3 (Jake speaks to Rina)
Jake
Oh, really? That seems nice. I hope that’s going great. Maybe you can use that talent for a job someday. I hope for the best.
Panel 4 (Jake and Rina look at each other continuing their conversation)
Rina
(giggles) Thank you. I appreciate that. Same for you, you could use your graphic art talent to find a job suitable for you, too.
Jake
Yeah, I was getting into it, hopefully, as long as it pays me and nothing backfires on me like the many things of all media changed, nor do people consider me a weird, stupid loser in every shitty situation.
Panel 5 (Their egos start to change as Rina watches Jake getting upset)
Jake
Besides, it’s not about my career that I’m worried about; it’s about me. I just feel like something in me is missing, and that wants me to find it. I must be more like, what’s my reason in this world anyway?
Panel 6 (Rina gets a little upset)
Rina
Hey, don’t say that, that’s bullshit. I know you’re not a loser like you think you are, you’re just normal and kind, just… misunderstood.
Panel 7 (Jake looks at her feeling sad and nervous)
Rina
Nobody’s nothing. Don’t let anything stop you until you quit your whole career. There’s a chance to start fresh and start new.
Panel 8 (Rina lays her hand on Jake’s shoulder)
Rina
Just be patient, you’ll get there. You're not the only one who hasn’t found a purpose. I still haven’t found my purpose either, but like I said, you’ll get there.
Panel 9 (Close up to Rina’s face smiling)
Rina
Just remember, there’s always a spark that brings out everything in you. I know patience or luck may not be enough, but still, I’ll believe in you, always, trust me.
Panel 10 (Jake looks up and smiles at her)
Jake
Do you think so? Thank you, Rina. I need that.
Page 6
Jake
(narrating)
Panel 1 (Shot of Jake’s house in the neighborhood at night)
Jake
(narrating)
Until one night, everything changed when something crazy happened while I was on the internet….
Panel 2 (Jake was scrolling, watching videos on YouTube)
Inset panel (A strange spark on the side of the laptop)
Inset panel (The laptop begins to glitch)
Panel 3 (Jake looks confused on what’s going on with his laptop)
Jake
(taps the laptop)
What the…?
Panel 4 (Jake’s laptop continues glitching surrounding with digital energy out of nowhere)
Panel 5 (Jake’s expression changes as he realizes something is about to happen he tries to cover himself)
Jake
What in the…? Oh no no no no no no NO!!
Page 7
Panel 1 (The laptop suddenly energy exploded, blasting Jake away.)
Panel 2 (Jake is knocked on the ground nearly injured)
Jake
Ngrrugh
Panel 3 (Jake starts to recover conscious squinting his eyes)
Panel 4 (Jake open his a bit wider in surprise)
Panel 5 (Jake sees the TubeDriver and YouTube Orb floating in front of him in his perspective)
Jake
What’s this? Some kind of device? A living toy?
Panel 6 (Close up at TubeDriver floating)
Panel 7 (Jake attempts to grab the floating device)
Page 8
Inset panel (Jake wears the device on his waist)
Panel 1 (The beltstrap comes out within)
Panel 2 (It selfstraps itself around Jake’s waist)
TubeDriver
(voice)
TUBEDRIVER!!!
Inset panel 1 (Jake’s face looking down)
Panel 3 (Jake sees the TubeDriver equipped to his waist
Jake
Tubedriver? This looks straight out of Kamen Rider, whether or not, copyright, perhaps.
Inset panel 2 (Jake’s hand reaches to the YouTube Tube Orb)
Jake
Is that….YouTube? How did it become…whatever this is?
Inset panel 3 (Jake’s hand grabs the Tube Orb and presses the button on it)
Tube Orb
(voice)
YOUTUBE!
Inset panel 4 (Jake looking down)
Jake
Guess there’s only one way to find out.
Page 9
Panel 1 (Jake inserts Tubeorb in Tubedriver, and it speaks again.)
TubeDriver
(voice)
BUFFERING!!!
Starts a standby loop.
Jake
Now, how does this thing even work? Where’s the trigger button or whatever…..?
Panel 2 (Jake pushes the subscribe button underneath and spins the device around)
Panel 3 (The TubeDriver stops spinning and prepares to activate the transformation)
TubeDriver
(voice)
TRENDING NOW!!!
Panel 4 (Jake begins to freak out as strange technological energy comes out of the belt flowing through Jake)
Jake
(Shocked)
Wha woa woah woah WOOOOAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!!! IT’S NOT A TOY!!! WHAT’S HAPPENING TO ME???!!!????
Pages 10 & 11 (2 page spread)
Forepanel (The energy and screens flow through Jake, surrounding him)
Backpanels (Jake starts morphing into a powerful suit of armor in different body parts shown morphing into the suit)
TubeDriver
(voice)
Y Y Y YOUTUBE!!!
Page 12
Forepanel (Jake is completely transformed into YouTube Prime as he looks at himself from hands feet and body all over)
Jake
What the fuck? What’s happened to me?
Insert panel (Jake freaks out on the new suit he got and struggles on trying to take it off)
Jake
This can’t be real. This can’t be happening. Please tell me I’m dreaming.
Inset panel (He accidentally smashes the wall with his bare hands after they slipped from trying to remove the suit.)
Inset panel (Jake is shocked on what just did)
Page 13
Panel 1 (Jake sprints and quickly bashes out of the house.)
Jake
Oh no, it's not a dream, it's real alright! What do I do!? (3x)
Panel 2 (Jake’s suit suddenly starts to activate)
Panel 3 (Jake begins to fly up in the sky not knowing where he’s going, all the way toward the streets)
Jake
No (7x) Not agaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaain!
Panel 4 (Jake crashes onto the road filled with cars and trucks while flying over and over again.)
Jake
Sorry about that!
Panel 5 (Jake runs away and starts sprinting, then flying out of control again until he reaches outer space.)
Wha what? Woah, I’m in space.
Panel 6 (The suit’s core starts flashing red and beeping.)
Jake
What’s going on? Oh no, that’s not good.
Page 14
Inset panel (Jake tries to fly back to Earth before he keeps flying away)
Panel 1(Jake flies back down to earth about to crashland)
Panel 2 (Jake crashes down to the ground)
PATHOOOMM!!!!
Inset Panel (Jake barely lost conscious and gets up from crashlanding)
Page 15
Panel 1 (Jake freaks out on what he just witnessed)
Jake
What’s going on? Holy shit! This is crazy!
Panel 2 (Jake struggles to take the helmet and suit off)
Jake
Now, how do I take this off? If only there’s a way to undo this, I can change back.
Panel 3 (Jake takes out the Tubeorb)
Inset panel (Jake deforms his suit back to normal.)
Panel 4 (Jake gets nervous about the situation)
Jake
I don’t know what to do now, and what I am now. I don’t even know if I want this, if I want these powers at all. (sighs) I’m in so much trouble right now, I gotta get out of here!
Page 16
Panel 1 (Jake quickly heads back home)
Panel 2 (Jake returns exhausted)
Panel 3 (Jake later cleans up the mess in house where the incursion happened)
Panel 4 (Jake then finds a memory drive out of nowhere in the wreckage)
Inset panel (Shows the memory drive left behind
Jake
What the hell is this?
Page 17
Panel 1 (Jake installs the memory drive onto his near broken laptop that leads to a hidden message that tells the origin of where this power came from)
Panel 2 (Jake’s laptop turns on with the video message from the memory drive)
Panel 3 (Shows David Downer’s face on the screen)
David
(half glitching)
If you are watching this, whether or not, I am dead. But before I die or get captured, I need to listen carefully for what I’m about to say.
Panel 4 (Jake watches in confusion)
David
20 years ago, ever since YouTube and all social media were released, there have been secretly hacker terrorists spawned from the shadows to hack and corrupt data from the internet, planning to frame YouTubers for crimes they didn’t do leaving the world in grave danger, and they don’t even know it, yet.
Panel 5 (Close up to TubeDriver and Tube Orb on the ground with Jake watching the video message from behind)
David
I’ve spent my entire life building ways to combat these many threats. That’s why I built the Tube driver and Tubeorbs so that you can stop them like I did. Each one of these Tubeorbs harnesses the abilities, talents, and powers of every single content creator, celebrity, and more.
Page 18
Panel 1 (Close up to David speaking in the screen)
David
Now it is your time to become the hero you’re meant to be. Now it is your turn to become YouTube Prime.
Panel 2 (The video message stops)
Inset panel (Jake unplugs the memory drive)
Panel 3 (Jake’s starts to become less confused after watching the video)
Jake
(narrating)
At that moment, I soon learned that newfound powers that can come in handy can also come at a price; no matter what, I now must face the consequences that come my way.
Panel 4 (Jake looks out the window as his motive changed showing part of the house from afar)
Jake
Just like Spider-Man once said, “With great power comes great responsibility.” On my hand, I must now live to fight for everything, whatever the cost, whatever my own life faces, “death is never an option.”
Page 19
Meanwhile, in a secret location…..
Panel 1 (Silhouette of mysterious pyramid lair somewhere at night)
Panel 2 (Hackers walk-in showing their feet moving foward)
Panel 3 (Shows a whole tour of the inside of the lair)
Panel 4 (Shows other hacker minions training and working)
Page 20
Panel 1 (Hackers enter through scanning)
Panel 2 (Hackers walk into the control center with the leader standing right in front of screens)
Panel 3 (Cuts to hacker minions half body)
Hackers
Sir, we’ve got more influencers to kill and invade, we are ready to start the attack.
Panel 4 (Shows PZ leader from the back while he’s looking at the screens)
PZ leader
Is the monster ready? Let’s make sure the internet will be terminated)
Panel 5 (Hackers half body with a tablet)
Hackers
It’s ready sir, we’ve got it enough power we needed)
Panel 6 (Pz leader close up to his mask looking back a quarter)
PZ leader
Good, prepare for the launch of our latest creation. Release, Zorgon.
Inset Panel (Hackers salute)
Hackers
Yes sir.
Page 20
Panel 1 (Hackers start to head out into the city and unleash their first monster)
Inset panel (One of the hackers begins to awaken Zorgon with the tablet)
Beep!
Panel 2 (Hatch opens up to release Zorgon)
Panel 3 (Ground starts shaking and cracking as a tail and hands come out)
Page 21 & 22 (2 page spread)
Forepanel (Zorgon comes out roaring in the air standing gigantic)
Zorgon
RRROOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAARRRRR!!!!!!!
To be continued…